A Quick Poem

Here is a peom I wrote the other day. Keep in mind I was going through a really difficult time and it may not make sense. Just don't be too harsh with the criticism.


Through thick and thin, you stood by my side.
But now this hole in my heart, I can not hide.
So many good memories, I can't pick just one.
What happended between us has made me numb.
I yearn for your feel and touch.
I just hope that someday, I have that much.

You want me to be happy, all on my own.
I constantly think about you and stare at my phone
I sit here waiting to hear your voice.
I really wish I didn't make that choice


You say you don't want to give me false hope,
but for now I'm just going to sit here and mope.
I know what I want for the first time ever.
Just please promise me you won't say "never".

I like it and I know it's how you're feeling right now...hang in there kid

Thank you jen. It's always good to hear kind words from a friend. Just remember that I'm here for you too.

Now that was sweet, and yes, I do know that

feels good to get it off your chest doesn't it? keep on writin.

It's lovely poem. And there is no criticism necessary when art, a part of your, is expressed in this manner.

Wise and piky, thank you for your replies. I know at some point everyone goes through what I have been going through. It just helps sometimes to write down what you are thinking.

I like the way it flows. Funny how our creativity is sparked by emotional hardship.

reply to post by earthman4


Thanks.

Yeah, emotional hardship is great inspiration. I just wish stuff like this would stop happening to me.

a little patience always helps. changes, good and bad, always come when you least expect it. and as quickly as the bad stuff happens, something good will come along to help you out.