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posted on Nov, 3 2012 @ 01:01 AM
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What if She Would Have Said Yes?

Almost 39 years ago
A woman made a choice
She made a choice for me
Because I did not have a voice

She was hemorrhaging badly
Blood was everywhere
To the hospital she went
Fore the pain she could not bare

The doctors searched
But only one heartbeat they found
It was hers and hers alone
The other did not make a sound

They scheduled a surgery
Called a DNC
They told her it was necessary
To rid her body of ME

The day before the surgery
A nurse checked her again
The look on her face
Was just short of a grin

A tiny heartbeat she found
Which brought the doctor to the room
He listened himself
Yet his look was of gloom

“The baby is not viable
And will be born brain dead
It will be a burden on your family
How about an abortion?” he said

She argued with the doctor
But he would not give way
“You have three boys already
Why put them through this disarray?”

“He will never walk or talk
Or do anything for himself
The rest of your family?
You may as well but their lives on a shelf”

My mother was strong
And I can almost hear her say
“He can be born a two headed monkey
But I am having him anyway”

A few months later
A baby boy was born
The doctors were shocked
Fore there were no reasons to mourn

They checked the baby
Looking for some sign
Of things they had told her
But it was not HIS design

Now, almost 39 years later
I have three boys of my own
I am healthy and intelligent
How had she known?

I thank God for my mother
And His guiding hand
When faced with the choice
My mother made a stand

She chose not to abort me
I am happy I confess
No need for me to worry about
"What if she had said yes?"

edit on 3-11-2012 by Quadrivium because: centering




posted on Nov, 3 2012 @ 01:05 AM
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Beautiful story.

SnF



posted on Nov, 3 2012 @ 01:06 AM
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Wow..
That is nothing short of beautiful.
That is so very touching and tells a great story of a strong mother giving her son a chance.
I love it, Star&Flag



posted on Nov, 3 2012 @ 01:25 AM
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I hope everyone enjoys this. The poem is completly true. Even the "two headed monkey" part lol.
This poem is only the second I have written. I took a couple of hours but I think it will make a wonderful gift for my mom. I am thinking of giving it to her on my birthday later this month. What do ya'll think? Will she like it?



posted on Nov, 3 2012 @ 01:27 AM
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Originally posted by Quadrivium
I hope everyone enjoys this. The poem is completly true. Even the "two headed monkey" part lol.
This poem is only the second I have written. I took a couple of hours but I think it will make a wonderful gift for my mom. I am thinking of giving it to her on my birthday later this month. What do ya'll think? Will she like it?


She'll love it.



posted on Nov, 3 2012 @ 01:31 AM
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You had me with the "two headed monkey" part

S & F




posted on Nov, 3 2012 @ 01:43 AM
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Beautiful...I'm not a poem kinda guy, but that one struck a nerve.

I hope you win on this one.

To all the others...no offense.



posted on Nov, 3 2012 @ 02:07 AM
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At first I thought the poem was a a bit trite. Some of the rhyming seemed forced. I read it out loud to myself and I changed my mind. It works well when spoken with punctuation and not a sing-song nursery rhyme voice. Good work and congratulations on having a family of your own.

The part about the two headed monkey made me laugh aloud as well



posted on Nov, 3 2012 @ 09:08 AM
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Kinda rushed on time. I will try to get back later and address each comment.
As of now I would like to reply to "theotters" comment.
As I said I would like to give this to my mother on my birthday in a couple of weeks.
I would greatly appreciate any help you can give to make it better.
I never have read much poetry and I am really at a lose.
If there is a problem with the punctuation or lack there of, could ya'll show me?
I would like to keep the words as they are if possible because they were from the heart but please feel free to give any advice on punctuation. By all means " quote" the poem with your take on the punctuation.
THANKS ATS!
Quad



posted on Nov, 3 2012 @ 09:32 AM
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That was beautiful! As for puncuation, when I write, and the words are flowing, I don't worry about it!



posted on Nov, 3 2012 @ 10:31 AM
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Originally posted by Quadrivium


What if She Would Have Said Yes?

Almost 39 years ago,
a woman made a choice.
She made a choice for me,
because I did not have a voice.

She was hemorrhaging badly;
Blood was everywhere.
To the hospital she went
for the pain she could not bear

The doctors searched
but only one heartbeat they found.
It was hers and hers alone;
The other did not make a sound.

They scheduled a surgery
called a DNC.
They told her it was necessary
to rid her body of ME!

The day before the surgery
a nurse checked her again.
The look on her face
was just short of a grin.

A tiny heartbeat she found
which brought the doctor to the room.
He listened himself,
yet his look was of gloom

“The baby is not viable,
and will be born brain dead
It will be a burden on your family.
How about an abortion?” he said.

She argued with the doctor,
but he would not give way
“You have three boys already.
Why put them through this disarray?”

“He will never walk or talk,
or do anything for himself
The rest of your family?
You may as well but their lives on a shelf”.

My mother was strong
and I can almost hear her say;
“He can be born a two headed monkey
But I am having him anyway”.

A few months later,
a baby boy was born
The doctors were shocked,
For there were no reasons to mourn.

They checked the baby,
looking for some sign.
Of things they had told her,
but it was not HIS design.

Now, almost 39 years later,
I have three boys of my own.
I am healthy and intelligent.
How had she known?

I thank God for my mother
and His guiding hand.
When faced with the choice,
my mother made a stand.

She chose not to abort me.
I am happy I confess.
No need for me to worry about
"What if she had said yes"?




Hope these changes will suffice.

edit on 3/11/12 by masqua because: (no reason given)



posted on Nov, 3 2012 @ 11:15 AM
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OUTSTANDING MASQUA!
It reads MUCH better now
Thanks! I know she will love it.
Quad



posted on Nov, 3 2012 @ 11:22 AM
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Your mom, and everyone else's including mine, deserves only the best we can give.

Always.



posted on Nov, 3 2012 @ 01:09 PM
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Originally posted by Katharos62191
reply to post by Quadrivium
 


Wow..
That is nothing short of beautiful.
That is so very touching and tells a great story of a strong mother giving her son a chance.
I love it, Star&Flag

Her and my dad both did a lot to get me here. When I was born I was the largest of their 4 children at 7lbs 8oz.
Thanks for reading and commenting Kath.
Quad



posted on Nov, 3 2012 @ 01:09 PM
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edit on 3-11-2012 by Quadrivium because: double post



posted on Nov, 3 2012 @ 01:33 PM
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Originally posted by beezzer
Beautiful story.

SnF


Thanks beezzer,
It's no "ode to my tinfoil had" but hey, I tried.

Thanks again,
Quad



posted on Nov, 3 2012 @ 06:05 PM
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Originally posted by SLAYER69
reply to post by Quadrivium
 


You had me with the "two headed monkey" part

S & F

Thanks for reading Slayer



posted on Nov, 3 2012 @ 08:56 PM
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Originally posted by TDawgRex
reply to post by Quadrivium
 


Beautiful...I'm not a poem kinda guy, but that one struck a nerve.

I hope you win on this one.

To all the others...no offense.


Wow thanks Rex.
I don't think I have a chance at winning though. It might help if I knew how to write poetryo

Thanks for reading it and thanks for the encouragement.



posted on Nov, 3 2012 @ 08:58 PM
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Powerful story with a beautiful ending. Thank you for that. S&F



posted on Nov, 3 2012 @ 10:52 PM
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Originally posted by TheOtter
At first I thought the poem was a a bit trite. Some of the rhyming seemed forced. I read it out loud to myself and I changed my mind. It works well when spoken with punctuation and not a sing-song nursery rhyme voice. Good work and congratulations on having a family of your own.

The part about the two headed monkey made me laugh aloud as well

Thank you for pointing out the problem with the punctuation Otter. You were right, it reads MUCH better with it





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