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And please... Since you seem to know... How much is "more than they should?" Who gets to decide whether someone is taking "more than they should?" Do we include the Bill Gateses and the Rothschilds in that?
Originally posted by Amaterasu
The point has little to do with readability, really, and I make no apologies for my novicehood as a writer.
I am not trying to sell this work.
But it's rude to come into this thread and make snide comments with no grasp of the full content.
Originally posted by NatureBoy
reply to post by Amaterasu
The NWO you speak of aren't exactly #proven# to be trying to kill 80% of us...I know, i know Alex said so.....
Look the world is complex, very complex and it doesn't have easy answers -the nwo if they exist probably know that a mass cull wouldn't be a very good idea, for a start who would do all the work?
But let's just assume that they don't kill 80% of us, ... so lets assume we don't die for a second...
Time will pass and society will develop, slowly we'll get better tech and spread it around, the stronger tech will displace the weaker tech -like how VHS was pushed aside to make room for DVDR or TiVo.
This development has been going on since before our little rock was even slime covered and it will continue most likely even after it's burnt up into dust.
Until we face up to the fact that we can't have it all and an extra scoop we are driving headlong into doooom.
So, i say reconsider the moral to your book - Yes it is a great vision for the distant future, however we need to know that the ONLY way we will ever get close to a system like that is by working hard and being sensible.
I'm sure i remember explaining that Tesla actually DID send projects he was working on out of america to the governments of hostile nations - this makes him a traitor and a spy as far as the law is concerned. Not only this but he also had made plans to have his project shipped out of the country after his death, thus the american government stepped in to stop it happening. Just because they wanted to check he didn't have anything worthwhile in his notebooks / designs doesn't mean he actually had something worth while - if the police want to search a car for drugs does it mean the boot is full of drugs?
I'm going to skip your other points, sorry but i just can't even get started about ol' Gary, i'll be here all night....
Still, it doesn't really matter anymore, this debate is somewhat of a moot point -we're having it a little too late, i was reading some stratfor, blomberg and FT earlier and oh gosh this depression is going to bite hard from the look of it. So if it makes you feel better then pretend you can have it all, i doubt very much you'll be able to keep the dream alive as our society crumbles.
Originally posted by Astyanax
No, you obviously did it because you fancy yourself a writer. Nothing wrong with that, but then you must accept the verdict of your peers with a good grace, not try to refute their points and insult them when they express their opinions.
You wrote your silly screed as a novel because you believe yourself to possess auctorial talent. Well, I hate to burst your bubble, but...
I am not trying to sell this work.
Money is not the only coin in which things are bought and sold. You are most certainly publicizing the work and urging people to read it. That's selling. Your OP even (hilariously) makes a selling point of the approach you have chosen (fictionalize; embroider). Well, I am here to post my review, just as you requested. Stop arguing and swallow it. That's what real writers do.
But it's rude to come into this thread and make snide comments with no grasp of the full content.
Fiddlesticks. Are you seriously trying to advise others on literary etiquette?
Then here is some from you. It is the height of bad manners to argue with anyone who criticizes your public work. It is permissible to correct them on matters of fact and that is all. A work of fiction is not a forum or blog post. Somewhat different courtesies apply.
I wouldn't even have bothered posting about yada yada rudeness and bile...
I, too, am trying to make a point: the point is that, if you hope to be an author, shut up and take the criticism. It's part of the job and if you can't handle it, don't apply. If you can't stand the heat, don't come in the kitchen.
Geddit?
And hey. If you had READ the work, I would be more than happy to deal with you.
It is the height of arrogance, rudeness and rectal-orificeness to "review" based on a single paragraph.
Originally posted by NatureBoy
reply to post by Amaterasu
ok thats it i can't take it anymore, sure the world is all about 'lizard hearted' people and david icke is right - Tesla managed to discover a way of making endless energy and the PTB just had all those wars over resources and energy which dominated the last century to keep us suppressed - 80% of us will be killed by the elite who will replace us with robots - the remaining people will have flying zen gardens.
Have your little excuse, write your (terrible)
e-books and try and convince everyone to be as greedy as you -
when the world is choking in methane and sulfa
just remember with your last few breaths -if everyone had just been a bit more receptive to the very obvious and very clear problems society faces maybe we could have avoided this terrible end.
I don't think i even care anymore, goodbye humanity
So with this i leave you my star-eyed friend, be as greedy and egotistical as you like, pretend with all your heart that you can fly your zen garden in the grand canyon and teleport fountains made by people with nothing better to do than make you stuff and covert your (awful) ebooks. It doesn't matter, we are doomed whatever happens -we might as well fade away smiling.
As for me, I'm going to enjoy the chaos of a crumbling world
- if anyone calls me immoral or pulls me up on my actions i'll just tell them that 'it's ok i know the truth and it's fine for me to do anything i want because this video i saw on youtube explained fairly convincingly that i don't need to worry about it, in fact I am trying to help everyone because i #just know# the world could be perfect as long as I do what it is that i just happen to like doing'
Originally posted by Swordbeast
Thank you for sharing your vision and I wish you all the best.
That tech curve was projected to go infinite in 2012.
That tech curve was projected to go infinite in 2012.
Originally posted by Astyanax
Originally posted by Amaterasu
Mind firmly closed, indeed.
To bad writing, always. I'm afraid it's been an lifelong prejudice with me.
Think on this, my dear: anyone who reads a book is paying the writer the great favour of their attention. To repay them in the coin of tedium and squirming embarrassment - on your behalf, incidentally - is not merely to waste their time; it is an insult.
Originally posted by Rivyolie
Reading through, this caught my eye:
That tech curve was projected to go infinite in 2012.
That date seem auspicious to anyone else here?
And now I remember... the Mayans predicted an age of enlightenment after the end of their calender. It might look something like a world of abundance, with an infinite tech level.
And... it broke. Bother. I never did read the first two chapters. And I only got up to page 46. It says the file is damaged and cannot be repaired. Oh. Dear.
Originally posted by Amaterasu
In my offered solution, everyone with internet access has the opportunity to work on the problem.
...
The efforts will be fully transparent (...) Not like agreements made in back rooms somewhere on the "behalf" of the people.