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The End of All Things to Come [CRE2017]

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posted on Jun, 1 2017 @ 03:43 AM
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Gritting his teeth, Jacoby loaded the last crate. His body tired from the long day; or had it been two? No matter, rest was on the immediate horizon. The pickup started and sped off. To where, he didn't care. This would be the his last evening with his family. It took a few months to reconcile that notion and it had been for the better.

Jacoby's wife was in the den with Mahk, their boy, barely two years old. He has no idea what is coming or what is to be. Miranda, his wife ran the boys toy cars around the floor with Mahks in tow. In this moment they were so happy, so oblivious. As Jacoby opened the door they both looked up. Mahk went running screaming "Dadeee, Daaadeee!"

Miranda giggled and gleamed. Such a sight that warmed her heart. "Are you home for the weekend now?"

"Yes, we've got the whole weekend darlin'!"

"Good, I've got the most amazing dinner planned for us tomorrow night," Miranda replied.

Internally, Mahk was trying to keep it all together. He knew they wouldn't make it to that dinner. Fact is, he hadn't told anyone of the strike that would annihilate the eastern seaboard. All the defenses were spent during the last attempt. "Few hours left," he thought.

He brought Miranda and Mahk into the living room. Set them down and drew them in close. Watching the news, you would never be able to tell that the apocalypse loomed on the horizon. Glancing back to the window, he saw it. A brief flash. He smiled. "You're early," he thought. Then darkness.



The End



edit on 1-6-2017 by JinMI because: Formatting

edit on 1-6-2017 by JinMI because: (no reason given)




posted on Jun, 1 2017 @ 06:31 AM
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Internally, Mahk was trying to keep it all together. He knew they wouldn't make it to that dinner.


You might want to do a quick edit: Jacoby is the Dad, Mahk is the little boy and you got them mixed up there at the end. Otherwise, good story.

edit on 1-6-2017 by DAVID64 because: (no reason given)



posted on Jun, 1 2017 @ 07:01 AM
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a reply to: DAVID64

Dang, missed my window. Good call.

Mebbe Mahk had advanced logic.



posted on Jun, 1 2017 @ 07:35 AM
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a reply to: JinMI

Hi JinMI!

Sheez, that got sad really fast. I'm glad the rest of the family didn't know what was coming...pretty heart breaking!

I'm surprised that you don't have your 'writer' status yet. Maybe this time!
I always enjoy a story that touches me emotionally.

S&F
Good luck in the contest!

jacy



posted on Jun, 1 2017 @ 07:38 AM
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originally posted by: jacygirl
I always enjoy a story that touches me emotionally.


People need a doll to find out where mine did that.



posted on Jun, 1 2017 @ 07:44 AM
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originally posted by: AugustusMasonicus

originally posted by: jacygirl
I always enjoy a story that touches me emotionally.


People need a doll to find out where mine did that.


My therapist suggested that I break all ties with you.
I asked if that meant zip ties too, and then she fired me as a patient.

Why you always getting me in trouble, eh?



posted on Jun, 1 2017 @ 07:45 AM
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originally posted by: jacygirl
Why you always getting me in trouble, eh?


Er, I'm evil?



posted on Jun, 1 2017 @ 07:49 AM
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originally posted by: AugustusMasonicus

originally posted by: jacygirl
Why you always getting me in trouble, eh?


Er, I'm evil?


That's exactly what my therapist said.



posted on Jun, 1 2017 @ 10:55 AM
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a reply to: JinMI

That was really good



posted on Jun, 1 2017 @ 11:02 AM
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Reminds me of Tc sum of all fears
Well done!




posted on Jun, 1 2017 @ 06:07 PM
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originally posted by: jacygirl
a reply to: JinMI

Hi JinMI!

Sheez, that got sad really fast. I'm glad the rest of the family didn't know what was coming...pretty heart breaking!

I'm surprised that you don't have your 'writer' status yet. Maybe this time!
I always enjoy a story that touches me emotionally.

S&F
Good luck in the contest!

jacy




Don't be to sad, Jacoby was smiling at the end. It's what creation has wrought and what creation also requires!

Thanks for reading.



posted on Jun, 1 2017 @ 06:56 PM
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a reply to: knowledgehunter0986

Thankya hunter!

@IwontGiveUP

Thank you as well!



posted on Jun, 2 2017 @ 05:13 PM
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a reply to: JinMI

Beaut short read. Enjoyed it.

Kind regards,

bally




posted on Jun, 3 2017 @ 11:45 PM
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a reply to: bally001

Thanks for the kind words Bally. Happy you enjoyed it!



posted on Jun, 3 2017 @ 11:59 PM
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a reply to: JinMI



Nice!



posted on Jun, 4 2017 @ 07:19 AM
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a reply to: DBCowboy

Thanks DB. Much appreciated!



posted on Jun, 6 2017 @ 02:19 AM
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originally posted by: AugustusMasonicus

originally posted by: jacygirl
Why you always getting me in trouble, eh?


Er, I'm evil?


I've not seen the reigning champs contribution yet.......

Have your basement dwellers gone on strike and refuse to type your words?



posted on Jun, 6 2017 @ 02:27 AM
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a reply to: JinMI

Hmm, yes, but the suspense is present.......not.





regards,

bally



posted on Jun, 6 2017 @ 09:13 AM
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originally posted by: JinMI
I've not seen the reigning champs contribution yet.......


Most likely sitting this out. The two takes on the theme I liked have been done already.



posted on Jun, 7 2017 @ 05:42 PM
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I liked the Melancholy ending.

Nicely done!



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