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A Victorian Poem

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posted on Aug, 2 2016 @ 11:08 AM
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~A Victorian Poem~


I daren't to thee say any more,
Unfruitful was it mostly shorn.

Watching as you batty-fang,
Your way through Nanty Narking sang.

A song of beating did you play,
Insanity, all that could afford.

Like a Ship without a brig,
Fully laden only gruel.

Swathes of Liberal words did spew,
From your lips, none were knew.

Ample time was given me,
To clear mine head and Vanish thee.
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posted on Aug, 2 2016 @ 11:12 AM
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a reply to: awareness10

Wow that was good writing and deep!!! The ending was strong. "Vanish thee!"



posted on Aug, 2 2016 @ 11:18 AM
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a reply to: Quantum12

Thankyou for that Quantum, i wanted this one to be different from the last, writing style.




posted on Aug, 2 2016 @ 12:18 PM
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a reply to: awareness10

For your partisan "ship" to so taint your aesthetic;

You must be so sad....
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posted on Aug, 2 2016 @ 12:49 PM
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a reply to: olaru12

I like writing with an edge.

Did you not like it?

Aesthetic - the branch of philosophy dealing with such notions as the beautiful, the ugly, the sublime, the comic, etc., as applicable to the fine arts, with a view to establishing the meaning and validity of critical judgments concerning works of art, and the principles underlying or justifying such judgments.
2.
the study of the mind and emotions



posted on Aug, 2 2016 @ 12:57 PM
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a reply to: awareness10




Did you not like it?


I liked it...you have a fantastic talent.



posted on Aug, 2 2016 @ 01:00 PM
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a reply to: olaru12

That's a relief, thankyou greatly



posted on Aug, 2 2016 @ 01:38 PM
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a reply to: awareness10

Poetry,
The art of figurative conversation, I would love to see a piece that has no aesthetic value..



posted on Aug, 2 2016 @ 01:42 PM
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a reply to: tikbalang

To me Poetry and Art go together. And Poetry like Art conveys no this way or that. The Poet simply expresses that which they feel at the moment of their Inspiration.




posted on Aug, 2 2016 @ 02:39 PM
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a reply to: awareness10

A transcending poem, a poem about you.. Is only about you



posted on Aug, 2 2016 @ 02:58 PM
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a reply to: tikbalang


The poems I write aren't about me but how I see others often times someone in particular. Not sure what you're alluding to here.

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posted on Aug, 2 2016 @ 03:14 PM
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a reply to: awareness10

Good luck I hope you can share your aesthetic poetry, it's good seeing your view on others..



posted on Aug, 2 2016 @ 03:18 PM
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a reply to: tikbalang

I don't know if you're being an a-hole or just self opinionated of others free will to express themselves. Clearly you don't get it.


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posted on Aug, 2 2016 @ 03:21 PM
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a reply to: awareness10

I wasn't able to properly comment after reading this earlier but it is great!

I love the darkness of it. At least that's what I took from it.

Of course, we all relate to things as we are familiar with them, don't we?

Good job Aware and please share more!




posted on Aug, 2 2016 @ 03:30 PM
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a reply to: TNMockingbird

Thankyou. I have always seen the other side and expressed that side of life which not everyone embraces.

I'm glad you liked it.

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posted on Aug, 2 2016 @ 03:34 PM
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a reply to: awareness10

I must admit 'batty fang' and 'nanty narking' made me laugh and deserve a star and flag, just for their inclusion.
That was great. I love stuff with thee and thou in it, and add to that, a sort of seaborn gothicy Victorian feel...hey, it's all good.

S+F



posted on Aug, 2 2016 @ 03:40 PM
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a reply to: midicon

Thankyou I appreciate that. I used old Victorian words not used anymore for fun more than anything so as to expand on my writing skills. More for myself than anything really. Just thought I'd share.



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posted on Aug, 3 2016 @ 02:34 AM
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a reply to: awareness10

Awareness, I just think it is beautiful. Written in a rhythm and a verse not seen often these days. Your picture and your words were made to make one think.....I did, and I am glad I did. Wonderful job. As far as some of the aesthetic ideas, I think you aesthetically spoke, wrote openly, not singularly, but for all that it touched to see.

Peace and Love


KD



posted on Aug, 3 2016 @ 03:00 AM
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a reply to: thenightisours

Thankyou for your kind words KD I do appreciate them, as all here.

It's nice just to make someone smile, somewhere, with the gifts that we have.

Peace and Kindness,

Awareness 1.0



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