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When Love Creeps Up

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posted on Apr, 21 2014 @ 06:56 PM
So i was out today walking in the hills. And kind of just came up with this one. Its just a poem. Watch that spear!

When love creeps up, There's nothing you can do
The mystical one, Throws a spear at you
It will never miss, No matter what you try
Gets a grip on you, Your brain will fry
It can make you happy, And lift your soul
And when it ends, Send you in a hole
A real dark place, Full of self doubt
Confidence shattered, Is there a way out?
A crazy ride, To test ones spirit
Can't shake that feeling, Almost Illicit
All the time invested, The patience tested
What was once so nice, Just turns septic
I used to crave it, Now im a skeptic
Just stupid dreams, I should have left it
The shield goes up, The drink does flow
Nights out consumed, With women in tow
Wake up in another warm stranger's bed
Your out out of control, But your appetites fed
Just kidding yourself, You're being misled
But before you know it, The spear hits again
Piercing your heart, You will not know when
Out of the blue, Love comes to reclaim
You and your soul, Its happened again
Maybe this time, It won't be in vein
Live happy forever, Or full circle again...

posted on Apr, 21 2014 @ 07:03 PM
I like how it comes full-circle at the end. Good one!
edit on 21-4-2014 by brazenalderpadrescorpio because: (no reason given)

posted on Apr, 21 2014 @ 07:04 PM
a reply to: TheDoctor46


Right in the feels! I liked this poem a lot actually even though I don't tend to care much for poems like this, I usually enjoy darker and more philosophical writings but this was just swell.

posted on Apr, 21 2014 @ 07:12 PM
a reply to: brazenalderpadrescorpio

Hey thanks for stopping by. Yes lol uncanny going full circle!

posted on Apr, 21 2014 @ 07:15 PM
a reply to: CagliostroTheGreat

Thanks a lot for liking it. I thought i would throw it on before i forgot it lol

posted on Apr, 21 2014 @ 09:38 PM
a reply to: TheDoctor46

It's all a big merry go round Doc! If you start getting motion sickness it's okay to jump off the ride for a bit and get your bearings. Problem is we just cant resist jumping back on even though we know it will make us dizzy and nauseous all over again! Sometimes you just have to take the ride because the thrill and feeling of letting go is worth all the puking in the end!

posted on Apr, 21 2014 @ 10:18 PM
a reply to: TheDoctor46

Ah, the fun filled roller coaster that is life. All those twists, turns, ups and downs until you're right back where you started.

Thanks for sharing your ride, it was awesome!

posted on Apr, 22 2014 @ 02:20 AM
a reply to: AstroRocks

Hey Astro. Yes the puking aint that good but it sure is one hell of a ride
..Thanks for dropping in my friend

posted on Apr, 22 2014 @ 02:23 AM
a reply to: Jennyfrenzy

Hi Jenny. Oh yes the roller coaster. The joys!!!...And eventually it does come full circle for a lot of us. Thanks for reading..Now your awesome!!

posted on Apr, 22 2014 @ 11:40 AM
Ah, love!

And if you stick around in a relationship long enough, it STILL goes around, waxes and wanes like the moon at times 'till BAM the spear is there in one's chest and you are so very glad the waning is over; deep appreciation for the beloved has returned to cause that beautiful pang, and then you realize the spear never left, only the world and its mundane realities merely distracted you from its obvious heart-piercing place, to cause the numbing of the willing heart.

Well done, Doctor. May the spear of love make you a willing kabob o' love!

- AB

posted on Apr, 22 2014 @ 11:47 AM
a reply to: AboveBoard

Lol. A willing kebab o' love!...Thats a new one to me
...I appreciate you dropping in to comment. Many thanks

posted on Apr, 24 2014 @ 11:49 AM
a reply to: TheDoctor46

Doc, nice poem and very true. I like this one.

S & F

posted on Apr, 24 2014 @ 12:19 PM
a reply to: DaphneApollo

Hiya Daphne
...Glad you enjoyed it. Hope your doing well and thanks for looking. See ya on your thread

posted on May, 13 2014 @ 09:07 AM
a reply to: TheDoctor46
Sorry I missed this one..
It's beautifully sad to me. You really do have a talent doc.

posted on May, 13 2014 @ 10:20 AM
a reply to: natalia

Hey better late than never. Well maybe one day people will say. He's almost as good as Natalia
...Thanks for dropping by

posted on May, 13 2014 @ 05:11 PM
I enjoy your writing.

Glad I stopped by the short stories forum to find this.

This forum has been dead for a while, hasn't it?


posted on May, 14 2014 @ 08:49 AM
a reply to: XxNightAngelusxX

Hi there. Thanks for commenting. And im sure glad you decided to stay here. Well i would love to see you writing again in this forum


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