The Leper (Poem)

Carried by the winds of despair
I fade into the oblivion of time
Forgotten as I am broken
By the ones I thought would care

A void in the depths of my mind
A black hole in the heart of my soul
A canyon where all is lost
Memories I do not rewind

Love is beyond my grasp
Like the rest of the world to me
Ugly I am the leper
I cannot remove this mask

Broken pieces of a time glass
Haunt me with a secret message
A never ending prophecy
Of failures I cannot pass

try suffering with morgellons.

THEN re-assess your "suffering".


are you healthy? do you have friends and family that love you?

go enjoy them!

many people have life a billion times worse than you.
quit writing self-pitying over exxaggerated goth-kid crap.


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Originally posted by prevenge
try suffering with morgellons.

A psychological disorder?

THEN re-assess your "suffering".


are you healthy? do you have friends and family that love you?

go enjoy them!

many people have life a billion times worse than you.
quit writing self-pitying over exxaggerated goth-kid crap.

Nothing better than a person who goes on the internet and assumes stuff about a persons life.

I'd tell you about my "suffering" but you are too much of a presumptuous ass to even take the time.

[edit on 10-2-2009 by grimreaper797]

reply to post by grimreaper797


Interesting... rather dark and forbidding. What was your muse?

Your rhyme scheme is cool! I'm incapable of not using iambic pentameter, I would probably have written something like:

On winds of despair
I fade into time,
Forgotten and broken
For light doesn't shine.

grim..loved it.
if i could put my feelings to words today..your poem would be perfectly matched.

reply to post by prevenge

quit writing self-pitying over exxaggerated goth-kid crap

?

If you wish to criticize the poem in order to make it better, then comments are welcome.

If you wish to criticize the poet, then they are not, since this is a WRITING FORUM and not a psychiatric couch.

Please comment on the topic and not the poster.



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[edit on 10/2/09 by masqua]

reply to post by grimreaper797


I don't read so much poetry, but this is awesome.

reply to post by 44soulslayer


There really isn't any specific drive when I write. Its a collection of everything before me in a certain perspective put into words.

As far as the rhyme scheme, I dont usually put much effort into making it rhyme, I just more or less experiment with it. change the pace and see how it comes out.