The Battle Part 1 and the end

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posted on Apr, 1 2004 @ 05:46 PM
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Originally posted by dreamrebel
I just didnt know because thier bodies were piled up at the feet of the regrouping enemy and I thought they may be regrouping by thier own dead..



The story was intended to be a bit confusing, I was trying to express the total chaos and carnage of battle I want to rewrite it into a longer story some day about a group of mountian Clans fighting to keep their independence from a quickly encroching "civilization"

Kind of like the Scottish battles with the English or the American Indian Wars or Civil War.




posted on Apr, 1 2004 @ 06:46 PM
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Thanks Dreamrebel and Worldwatcher for your reactions I am glad you liked it, and thanks to all the rest of you for your support.



posted on Apr, 1 2004 @ 06:58 PM
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Carnage well told. Kinda eerie. Nice job Amuk. Thanks.



posted on Apr, 1 2004 @ 09:32 PM
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Amuk

That was seriously excellent! Totally loved it


You should really keep on writing when you some more free time and I hope your son win or get a high rank in the tournament. I'm sure he's well trained.



posted on Apr, 1 2004 @ 10:03 PM
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That held me from the beginning. Perfect ending too.



posted on Apr, 2 2004 @ 09:14 AM
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Great! Now you got me wanting to go out and buy an axe.



posted on Apr, 2 2004 @ 04:36 PM
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I want to again thank everyone for their kind words on my first attempt at a story. I have a couple others I am working on, one of which is pretty short, I will try to post them as soon as I can.

I also want to think everyone for their encourgement for my son, we will be heading for his SECOND Arkansas State Championship in a few months.

And I think God that so far in the battles he fights the winner and the loser both go home that night.



posted on Apr, 2 2004 @ 05:02 PM
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Interesting ending Kinda creepy with the bloodlust. But an interesting read.



posted on Dec, 2 2004 @ 09:14 PM
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I thought I would bump this back up for those who havent read it because this is the first two parts and here is the last

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