Ive started going through the draft act. Its pretty hardcore legalese
This is the first piece that set alarm bells off in my head.

103.2 Financing a terrorist
(1) A person commits an offence if:
(a) the person intentionally:
(i) makes funds available to another person (whether directly or indirectly); or
(ii) collects funds for, or on behalf of, another person
(whether directly or indirectly); and
(b) the first-mentioned person is reckless as to whether the other
person will use the funds to facilitate or engage in a terrorist
act.
Penalty: Imprisonment for life.
This is too vague! Who defines what is "reckless". If I donate money to the Australian Red Cross, who then provide food aid to say earthquake
ravaged Pakistan. The food aid makes its way to terrorists, now my donated money is aiding terrorists. I would technically be breaching this proposed
law.
There are many other examples of how easily you can run foul of this proposed law. Invest in a mutal fund who invests your money in a company that has
ties to terrorist groups and youre going to jail, possibly for life.
Absurdity!

104.3 Making a control order
The issuing Court may make an order under this section in relation
to the person, but only if:
(a) the senior AFP member has requested it in accordance with
section ^104.2; and
(b) the Court is satisfied on the balance of probabilities
(i) that making the order would substantially assist in
preventing a terrorist act; or
(ii) that the person has provided training to, or received
training from, a listed terrorist organisation; and
(c) the Court is satisfied on the balance of probabilities that each
of the obligations, prohibitions and restrictions to be imposed
on the person by the order is reasonably necessary, and
reasonably appropriate and adapted, for the purpose of
protecting the public from a terrorist act.

If the Federal Police have information which could convince a judge to deprive an Australian citizens of their freedom, then they should arrest the
citizen and put them on trial. If the AFP have evidence proving this citizen is about to carry out, or aid, a terrorist attack they can be arrested
and put on trial. The same applies if they are providing or receiving terrorist training.
Control orders are circumventions of due process and have no place in a modern democratic state.
These are the requirements of Control Orders as described in the proposed Act:
(a) a prohibition or restriction on the person being at specified
areas or places;
(b) a prohibition or restriction on the person leaving Australia;
(c) a requirement that the person remain at specified premises
between specified times each day, or on specified days;
(d) a requirement that the person wear a tracking device;
(e) a prohibition or restriction on the person communicating or
associating with specified individuals;
(f) a prohibition or restriction on the person accessing or using
specified forms of telecommunication or other technology
(including the Internet);
(g) a prohibition or restriction on the person possessing or using
specified articles or substances;
(h) a prohibition or restriction on the person carrying out
specified activities (including in respect of his or her work or
occupation);
(i) a requirement that the person report to specified persons at
specified times and places;
(j) a requirement that the person allow himself or herself to be
photographed;
(k) a requirement that the person allow his or her fingerprints to
be taken;
(l) if the person consents—a requirement that the person
participate in specified counselling or education.

What I have issue with, besides the substantial breaches of the United Nations Universal Declaration of Human Rights, is the impact this would likely
have on families where the bread-winner is the subject of a control order.
These abridgements to civil liberties would make it impossible to hold down a job. What would happen to the dependants when the subject of the control
order loses their job? Would the Federal Government assist the family or compensate them for their loss of their job? Would the family receive food
aid or is that not the problem of the Federal Government? Could the subject of the control order apply for unemployment benefits? Would the subject of
the control order be able to disclose the reasons as to why they lost their job, and why they are unable to search for another a replacement job to
their dole officer?
These questions need to be addressed by the Federal government as it has the potential to ruin the lives of entire families. This is completely
unacceptable to me, and I assume many other Australians would feel the same way.
I mentioned the UN's Universal Declaration of Human Rights, the breaches in this act also pertain to the United Nations Covenant on Civil and
Political Rights. The aspects which this act breaches are as follows:
# the right to legal recourse when their rights have been violated, even if the violator was acting in an official capacity
# the right to liberty and freedom of movement
# the right to equality before the law
# the right to presumption of innocence til proven guilty
# the right to appeal a conviction
# the right to privacy and protection of that privacy by law
# freedom of thought, conscience, and religion
# freedom of opinion and expression
# freedom of assembly and association
United Nations Agreements on Human Rights
The Australian government is also legally bound to uphold the contents of the UN's Convention against Torture and Other Cruel, Inhuman or Degrading
Treatment or Punishment. Australia signed the convention on 10th Dec 1985 and ratified it on 8th Aug 1989:
Source. In 1993 the Australian government officially gave the UN's
Office Of The High Commissioner for Human Rights the authourity to legally monitor the aforementioned Convention in Australia:

28 January 1993
"The Government of Australia hereby declares that it recognises, for and on behalf of Australia, the competence of the Committee to receive and
consider communications to the effect that a State Party claims that another State Party is not fulfilling its obligations under the aforesaid
Convention; and
The Government of Australia hereby declares that it recognises, for and on behalf of Australia, the competence of the Committee to receive and
consider communications from or on behalf of individuals subject to Australia's jurisdiction who claim to be victims of a violation by a State Party
of the provisions of the aforesaid Convention."

OHCHR - Committee against Torture
The UN's Convention against Torture and Other Cruel, Inhuman or Degrading Treatment or Punishment says that a state would breach this Convention if
it breaches "article 7 of the International Covenant on Civil and Political Rights, both of which provide that no one shall be subjected to torture
or to cruel, inhuman or degrading treatment or punishment"

Article 7
No one shall be subjected to torture or to cruel, inhuman or degrading treatment or punishment. In particular, no one shall be subjected without his
free consent to medical or scientific experimentation

I would class locking some one up in their own home without access to the outside world extremely cruel. The provisions in this Control Order allow
for solitary confinement in your own home for an indefinate period of time. There is no legal obligation for the State to keep them alive either. They
could be allowed to starve or jailed for breaching their control order. Who writes this stuff?
I thought the following could the first piece of this act that gives invidual rights of Australians some kind of respect:

Subdivision B—Rights in respect of control order
104.9 Service and explanation of control order
(1) As soon as practicable after a control order is made in relation to a
person, the senior AFP member who requested the order:
(a) must serve the control order personally on the person; and
(b) must inform the person of the following:
(i) the effect of the order;
(ii) the period for which the order is in force;
(iii) the effect of sections ^104.10 to ^104.13; and
(c) must ensure that the person understands the information
provided under paragraph (b) (taking into account the
person’s age, mental capacity and any other relevant factor).
(2) A failure to comply with paragraph (1)(c) does not make the
control order ineffective to any extent.
So the AFP can inform you of all this but if you dont understand it, tough luck:
Federal Policeman: Hey there cobber,
You are hereby under a federal control order
The control order starts today and will remain in force for 12 months
You may not leave your place of residence unless we say so
You cannot talk to the following people: anyone and everyone we say so
You cannot watch TV, use the internet, use your phone
You cannot inform anyone apart from your immediate family that you are safe and that your are not permitted to talk about your current cirumstances
Got it?
Subject of the control order: What the hell are you talking about?
Federal Policeman: Bye
Now you better not contradict the control order or you're going to jail.
Think your lawyer could get you out of this misunderstanding? WRONG. But hey, the Federal Government or the police NEVER make mistakes so dont
worry!

104.10 Lawyer may request copy of control order
(1) A lawyer of the person in relation to whom the control order is
made may attend the place specified in the order under paragraph
^104.4(1)(f) in order to obtain a copy of the order.
(2) This section does not:
(a) require more than one person to give the lawyer a copy of the
order; or
(b) entitle the lawyer to request or be given a copy of, or see, a
document other than the order.
That means your lawyer, if youre allowed to talk to them, is only allowed to get access to the control order holding you. They are not legally
entitled to view the evidence the government/federal police are locking you up based on. So your lawyer will be an overpaid, delivery man who can only
show you the dates, times, duration, and signature of those who want you locked up. They do not have a hope in hell of getting you freed if youre
mistakenly placed under a control order. Whether you are someone with a similar name as a terrorist or a terrorist has stolen your identity and is
implicating you in a terrorist plot via your credit card or phone details: you will never know.
Edit: Im going to continue to post my synopsis and comments in this thread as I find them. Im then going to collate my points into a letter which I
will send to the Victorian Premier, as well as other politicians. I'll start an Op/Ed with the contents of my letter and include any replies I get to
them in that thread.
[edit on 17/10/05 by subz]