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posted on Jan, 24 2015 @ 09:37 PM
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You should not think too much
It never does us good
You should not speak too much
It only serves to bring us ill
You should not hear too much
It never turns out for the best
You should not say too much
It always bites us in the end

Time and place
Feelings and grace
A grand design
Without a mind

You should not be too much
It hurts your friends and family
You should not feel too much
It makes the rest unbearable
You should not live too much
It just makes the others mad

Time and space
Ills and grace
A frame of mind
A flawed design

You should not imagine too much
It only makes you weak
You should not ask too much
It makes you seem ungrateful
You should not love too much
It heals your heart and mends your mind

A time or place
Outside of grace
A brand new lie
For a fractured mind




posted on Jan, 25 2015 @ 12:38 AM
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a reply to: CagliostroTheGreat

oh so fine



posted on Jan, 25 2015 @ 04:33 AM
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a reply to: CagliostroTheGreat

That was almost painful, no it was painful, to read. The way you slowed the poem down with the length of the lines was very clever and very effective.
I'll counter your poem though, with another perspective:


And then the day came,
when the risk
to remain tight
in a bud
was more painful
than the risk
it took to
Blossom.


Anais Nin



posted on Jan, 25 2015 @ 10:07 AM
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a reply to: TerryMcGuire

Thanks!



posted on Jan, 25 2015 @ 10:10 AM
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a reply to: beansidhe

I have been told I have an unorthodox poetic style which tends to ruffle many purists but its mine. Thanks.




posted on Jan, 25 2015 @ 10:18 AM
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Great poem. Almost seems lyrical, I like that.



posted on Jan, 25 2015 @ 10:21 AM
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a reply to: CagliostroTheGreat

That's really good my friend!!

Deep.. I really like it



posted on Jan, 25 2015 @ 10:21 AM
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a reply to: HAZE3

Glad you liked it, thanks!




posted on Jan, 25 2015 @ 10:24 AM
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a reply to: natalia

Hey its that cat that likes poetry again! Thanks Nat!




posted on Jan, 25 2015 @ 03:26 PM
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a reply to: CagliostroTheGreat

It's a wonderful style, and the emotion comes through clearly. Never be afraid to ruffle some purists!

ETA: EEK! I didn't mean it was painfully bad, I meant I could feel pain as I read it; it left me feeling sad. Just re-read my original comment, and it didn't quite capture what I was trying to say. Sorry about that!!!
insert slinking-off-to-dark-place smiley here :
edit on 25-1-2015 by beansidhe because: apology



posted on Jan, 25 2015 @ 04:13 PM
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a reply to: CagliostroTheGreat

Cagli This Poem is Very well done! Definitely S + F for You!! Syx.

edit on 25-1-2015 by SyxPak because: (no reason given)



posted on Jan, 25 2015 @ 05:17 PM
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a reply to: beansidhe

No worries. I knew what you wanted to say.



posted on Jan, 25 2015 @ 05:17 PM
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a reply to: SyxPak

Thanks syx!



posted on Jan, 25 2015 @ 11:53 PM
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a reply to: CagliostroTheGreat

You are Quite Welcome Bro!!!



posted on Jan, 26 2015 @ 11:07 PM
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a reply to: CagliostroTheGreat
Presto spaghettios. Post revised, then removed, for sensitivity purposes...Jeez.
edit on 12amTuesdayam272015f2amTue, 27 Jan 2015 00:40:12 -0600 by galadofwarthethird because: Moody guy complaining.



posted on Jan, 26 2015 @ 11:14 PM
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a reply to: galadofwarthethird

So... you are just here to mock me then? Classy.




posted on Jan, 26 2015 @ 11:25 PM
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a reply to: CagliostroTheGreat
Only as far as mocking is related to mocking...Bird.

Really dont know what your talking about. Just put down a bunch a sentences, mostly what came to mind while watching other stuff on YouTube. Don't be so serious...Jeez.

Classy, you always assume such things.



posted on Jan, 26 2015 @ 11:34 PM
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a reply to: galadofwarthethird

When I write poems like this I write them from the heart. Your little mish-mash of low brow humor, malformed pop-culture references and potty jokes was uncalled for.

If you want to write childish limericks there are infinite blank threads just waiting for an OP. Reserve your musings for them please. The only reason I haven't reported your... addendum is because I disdain appealing to "authority" so I would thank you to refrain from posting such in the future.

I post here to share my thoughts, feelings and ideas in verse, non-rhyming though it may be. If you have something constructive to add feel free to share but please, leave your third grade ramblings at the door.



posted on Jan, 27 2015 @ 12:06 AM
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Wow!! Very deep indeed. I got mixed feelings with this. But I loved it. Thanks for sharing!

a reply to: CagliostroTheGreat



posted on Jan, 27 2015 @ 12:07 AM
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I guess that's the cat who doesn't Appreciate good poetry...?

a reply to: CagliostroTheGreat




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