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The Storm [Pic2016]

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posted on Apr, 23 2016 @ 05:03 PM
I had writer status before I joined the ATS staff, but I'm only entering to participate, not to win anything. You have all inspired me to write this.

The Storm

Over twenty years ago, not long after I arrived in this old land of the Czechs in the middle of Europe, I went to stay at a friend's cottage. Pavel had a week off from work and offered to show me around the district. It was a beautiful region, with forests and lakes all around, and sleepy little villages lying half-hidden in quiet valleys. The first two days went by with that magical quickness of seeing the new that is also old and I became forever more enchanted by the land, its people and its long and often eventful history.

On the third day my friend got a phone call as we had breakfast. His apologetic boss wanted him to come back in to work: they had an urgent order to fill and needed his help to get it done. As he quickly downed his coffee, he told me to just take a walk in the forest and enjoy the peace and quiet; he'd be back again in time for dinner.

A couple of hours later I was well into the forest, making my way along one of the little pathways that had been worn by countless generations of wandering deer. Finding a little brook of crystal-clear water, I sat and rested a while, just enjoying the sounds of the breeze through the treetops and the chirping birds. A small woodpecker, completely unconcerned by my presence, pecked busily at a nearby soaring spruce.

Then, as I rested back on the grass and watched the bird go about its task, I heard a soft, feminine voice behind me. Sitting up and turning, I saw a woman of about 25 or so who was strolling in my direction and humming a tune as she walked along.

“Good day,” she greeted me in Czech, smiling and waving as she drew closer.

I replied in the same language. It was one of the few things in Czech that I had learned to say properly since I'd arrived.

Instantly recognizing my unusual accent, she smiled even more and said in English, “Oh, you are British, perhaps?”

“Well, I was born there, but then I lived in Australia. I only arrived in the Czech Republic a month ago.”

She set down the small basket of freshly-picked berries she had been carrying and sat beside me. “Oh, now I understand why your accent is so unusual. Almost British, but not exactly.”

“I'm a mixture,” I smiled, fascinated that she had picked up on that. Offering my hand, I said, “My name is Mike.”

“Karolina,” she replied, taking my hand.

I could spin a story and say she was my image of the perfect woman and it was love at first sight. But no, although she had a deep beauty, especially in her incredibly dark blue eyes, I didn't feel that kind of attraction. I just felt – this might sound odd – I felt like I was meeting an old friend. It was as if we had met long ago then not seen each other for years, and were now taking up where we left off.

After holding her hand for longer than I normally would, I released it. Seemingly untroubled, Karolina began asking me what had brought me to her country, what it was like in Australia and so on. Time just went quietly by and we simply talked. Her English was incredibly good, and so was her ability to teach me Czech. In the course of the next hour, she helped me to learn more than I'd managed to pick up in the previous month.

Then the sudden sound of rumbling thunder threatened a fast-approaching storm.

“That's quite a storm,” I commented, trying not to sound too concerned. In truth, I had an almost pathological fear of being caught out in the open in a lightning storm.

“Yes,” she nodded, peering through the trees and watching the storm clouds roil and roll closer over the nearby hilltops. “It will be here soon. Five or ten minutes, I think.”

As the thunder grew even louder and more ominous I asked, “Aren't we – aren't we supposed to try and get to the bottom of the hill or something?”

Karolina just smiled, “This is a big hill. We don't have time.” She nodded over in the direction she had come from. “There is a little clearing close by, just a minute or so away. We should go there.”

We went back down the pathway until we reached the clearing. There, we sat down on the grass side by side, the nearest big trees perhaps thirty feet away.

Looking quite unperturbed, Karolina said simply, “So, let's just relax and watch.”

She rested back on the grass and I lay beside her. Then after glancing at me, she offered her hand. “Don't be afraid,” she said softly. “It will be okay.”

I took her hand but as a huge peal of thunder echoed off the surrounding hills, I wasn't even able to reply.

For the next minute or so, we just looked up at the piece of sky directly above us, seemingly hemmed in by the soaring shapes of the trees, our normal perspective of their vertical, parallel lines now somehow distorted and making it look as if they would meet and merge together if they grew tall enough.

Shredded clouds scudded across as if fleeing the Thor-like thunder.

“It's beautiful, isn't it?” Karolina whispered. “So powerful, but also beautiful.”

“Yes... I guess this is better than trying to – to run away from the storm.”

She turned her head a fraction and regarded me calmly, as if reading my very soul. “Things often take on a different perspective when you face them.”

“I – I suppose they do.”

After a few seconds she asked quietly, “Do you want to talk about it?”

At first I pretended not to understand what she meant, but when Karolina squeezed my hand and said, “Just tell me what happened. It will help you,” I allowed those hidden fears and old memories to rise up and tried to put them into words.

“It was when I was about 18 years old,” I began. “I was out on a hiking trip with a group of friends and we were walking through a forest. It was a hot summer's day, just like today. And then a storm came in. Before we knew it, there was thunder and lightning all around us. We needed to get down the hill as fast as we could, so crouching low as we ran, we headed off. And then...”

I sighed and paused, and Karolina squeezed my hand again. “Go on. Let it out.”

“Then I remember this horrible feeling around me. The air buzzed and then there was the flash and the bang, all together. It was so loud... The next thing I knew, I was lying there and my ears were ringing and I could barely see or hear anything.”

Karolina gave me a searching look. “Were you hurt badly?”

“No, I was okay after a while. But three of my friends – including my best friend Jim – were badly burned. I'll never forget the way they looked. They'd lost all their hair, and their faces were all covered in ash and dust. They looked like – like old porcelain dolls' heads.”

[Continued in next post]

edit on 23/4/16 by JustMike because: I fixed a typo.

posted on Apr, 23 2016 @ 05:04 PM
Karolina shook her head and breathed, “Did they all survive?”

“They all lived, but... But it was an awful time, waiting there until the storm passed and we could go and get help for them.”

She closed her eyes for a moment and as she did, I saw tears escape and run down her cheeks. “And did they recover?”

“Well, they recovered as well as anyone could from such an experience.”

There was a flash of lightning and the crack of thunder followed not even two seconds later. I swallowed. “That was close.”

“We'll be okay. Don't worry.” She looked over at me and smiled, “How was Jim?”

“He – he was hurt the worst.” Then I managed a half smile and went on, “But he had an amazing inner strength. I learned a lot from him, with how he dealt with it all. I remember after he got out of hospital I went to visit him at home. He was resting on the sofa in the living room, just lying back and staring into this old mirror he was holding.”

“A mirror?”

“Yeah. He still had half his face bandaged, but when I walked in and asked how he was doing, he just smiled this funny lop-sided grin and said, 'I'm doing okay. And I don't look too bad, either'. He turned the mirror around – and it was so covered in dust I couldn't see myself in it at all!”

Karolina laughed, “And how did he really look?”

“A lot better than he did a few weeks earlier when it all happened.” I shrugged, “So, I told him that. Then I asked why he was using a mirror he couldn't even see himself in.”

“And he said?”

“He said, 'Because I can see myself as I want to.” I sighed, “He was really something, you know, and –”

The air buzzed around us and just as I breathed, “Oh, no...” there was the flash and the massively loud concussion as the lightning struck. My ears rang and I felt as if everything was spinning around me. As I began to get my senses back and I noticed Karolina wasn't holding my hand any more, I looked over to see if she was okay.

She wasn't there.

Stunned, I tried to sit up and look around, but even as I saw that she was nowhere in sight, my head swam again and I found myself lying on my back once more, looking up at the sky. It was starting to clear as the storm blew past, and as I lay there, trying to make sense of what had just happened, I saw another shape appear.

“Let the fear go,” Karolina said gently as she floated in the air above me. “Let it all go. You're safe now, it's all in the past, and you learned what you needed to learn. And don't worry, I will always protect you – just like I did this time, and that time with your friends.”

With a last gentle wave of her hand, the angel moved her beautiful wings and flew away.

posted on Apr, 23 2016 @ 05:06 PM
a reply to: JustMike

S/F now I will go read your story because I know it will be great! I will let you know!

posted on Apr, 23 2016 @ 05:17 PM
Well done Mike.
Well done!

posted on Apr, 23 2016 @ 05:23 PM
a reply to: JustMike

Now I know why you are a author!
Awesome story!

posted on Apr, 23 2016 @ 05:39 PM
a reply to: Gordi The Drummer and a reply to: Quantum12
Thank you both.

Again, in my usual crazy, mixed-up fashion, I had no idea how this story would end when I started it. It only became clear when I realized that the angel picture had to be the last one I used.

posted on Apr, 23 2016 @ 06:00 PM
Well done Mike!

posted on Apr, 23 2016 @ 07:04 PM
a reply to: JustMike


posted on Apr, 23 2016 @ 11:20 PM
a reply to: JustMike
Well done! I liked that very much.

posted on Apr, 24 2016 @ 04:04 AM
a reply to: JustMike

That was gripping in a quiet way, I couldn't stop reading. I really enjoyed that story and how you used the photographs to punctuate the similes. There is a gentle reassurance in Karolina that somehow, we're going to be ok.
Loved it, just loved it.


B x

posted on Apr, 24 2016 @ 11:04 AM
Nicely done. You have an awesome talent. Well look for other works of yours

posted on Apr, 24 2016 @ 03:32 PM
Thank you, everyone. It was an enjoyable one to write.

posted on Apr, 24 2016 @ 03:33 PM
a reply to: beansidhe
Just needed to comment on this.

I'm so glad you loved it, but especially that you got the feeling about Karolina that I most wanted to convey.

She's very special.

posted on Apr, 24 2016 @ 03:35 PM
a reply to: rgclark4
Thank you also. Feel free to visit my ATS thread about my new book. You can read the first three chapters of it free via the Amazon page I link in the thread. (The first one in my signature.)

posted on May, 17 2018 @ 04:42 PM
Such a beautiful story. I was concerned when you couldn't find her for a minute, and then, goosebumps.
But a lovely ending to a lovely story.

posted on Aug, 29 2018 @ 10:02 AM
a reply to: angeldoll
Thank you.
And my aplogies for not noticing your post much, much sooner.

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