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The Doll Maker [PIC 2016]

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posted on Apr, 14 2016 @ 04:28 PM

Detective James Francis scuffed through the fallen leaves. The only illumination was provided by the bone-white moon that sent faint rays of light filtering through the leafless branches of the thick woods that surrounded him. He was close to his quarry now. He could feel it.

The Doll Maker. He wasn't sure where the name had come from. It was something that was whispered in fear on the streets. To the department, he was nothing more than an urban legend. His own partner thought that he was chasing shadows. If it hadn't been for the latest victim, Francis's own wife, the detective might have believed it himself.

A rash of disappearances had struck the homeless population. Nobody cared. The homeless were seen to be less than human and anyway, they were notorious for not staying in the same place long. Next came the children. Still, not much concern was raised. After all, kids ran off. Abusive fathers, domineering parents, teenage angst-the list went on.

Something about the case had snagged his attention from the start. There was just something about it, something he couldn't put his finger on. He'd poured over case after case late into the night trying to find patterns, all the while his co-workers laughed behind his back and told him to just let it go. Each trail he'd followed had lead to a dead end. That was until one cool October night when he'd interviewed a prostitute who had witnessed a teen being coaxed into a dark colored panel van. She had just finished with a john and was emerging from an alley and had seen the driver illuminated by a street light. She'd described him as white, middle aged, a real looker. He'd felt a tickle in the back of his brain when he'd heard the description. He was sure that it was somebody he knew.

That's when the calls had begun; each one more threatening than the last. He would have gone to the chief about them but the records were gone as soon as they were made. He didn't know how it was done. Whoever made those calls had to have had some technical experience. He hadn't stopped digging though. Now he wished he had.

He'd gotten home from his shift a month ago to find the house empty. He'd searched the house and found nothing amiss, except for Diana's purse sitting on the counter beside the carrots, potatoes, and roast she was going to fix for dinner. The roast, frozen the night before, was now thawed. He had no idea how long it had been sitting out. He'd made desperate calls to her friends but to no avail. That's when he made a call into the department and gotten them involved.

He was disgusted, but not surprised, when blame for her disappearance had fallen on him. After all, how many times had he been on the other end of an interview, tearing a suspect's story apart. The spouses were always the first to fall under suspicion. When the officers had found nothing they offered condolence and moved on. The official story was that she'd left him. Police officers had high divorce rates, after all. It was nothing new.

Francis had taken a leave of absence to hunt for the monster responsible on his own. If anything, his fellow detectives were happy to see him go. He'd become an embarrassment. It had taken him a couple of weeks and many more false leads until finally he'd found an old deed at the county court house. Now here he was, deep in the woods, with a crumbling old mansion ahead of him.

He stepped through the door, dirt gritting under his feet, and beheld a statue of an angel. It guarded a staircase. It looked like marble at first glance but something seemed off. Francis walked up to it and ran his fingers along one of its arms. It was made of plaster and had been painted to resemble marble. Being as silent as possible, he chipped away at one of the statue's hands.

His worst fears were confirmed when the plaster crumbled away. A decaying human hand stuck out from the hole he'd made. Something about the wedding ring on it's finger sent him into a panic. He chipped away the rest of the plaster, bashing it with the butt of his gun, unmindful of the noise he was making. Diana's corpse fell into his arms. Pressure built up in his body until he thought he would explode. His screams of anguish echoed through the house. He laid her body on the floor and turned toward the stairs.

A chuckle drifted down from above. "I'm so pleased that you could join me, Detective. I see that you've found my gift. I warned you to leave me alone."

He pulled back the hammer of his revolver and climbed the stairs, keeping to the edge so they wouldn't creak. He saw a long hallway extended to both wings of the house when he reached the upper landing. Dust was everywhere. A faint trail veered off toward the left and he went that way. He came upon a pile of doll's heads. He wasn't surprised when he kicked one, breaking it, and found the skull of a child grinning up at him from the hole he'd made.

Heart racing, he edged further along the hall, holding his breath. One foot, two feet, three. A door at the end stood open. A faint shaft of light fell into the corridor. He slipped up to it and did a quick peek around the frame. It was a large room. The original furnishings were shoved and jumbled against the walls, making room for a rough work shop. He lunged into the room.

It was lit by a few kerosene lanterns. Shadows danced with the flickering of their flames. Ahead was a large table. A body was strapped to it. Francis couldn't tell if she was dead or alive. He came closer. It was the prostitute he'd talked to, the one that had given him the description of the van driver. Her chest rose and fell, ever so slowly. She looked like she'd been drugged.

A mirror sat on top of a rickety dresser across the room. He saw the dim reflection of a figure behind him. He spun and saw a man (six foot two and heavy, wearing dark clothes and what looked like a leather mask). His arm was raised. He held a wooden club.

"You bastard! You killed my wife!" Francis swung the gun up and squeezed the trigger until the hammer clicked on empty cylinders.

The figure crumpled to the ground without a sound. Francis went up to the body, kicking aside the club. He reached down and pulled off the mask. A gasp of shock escaped him.

It was none other than his captain. He made sure that he was dead and went back to the woman on the table. She was just coming around. He undid her bonds and helped her to a chair. He pulled out his cell phone and was relieved that there was service. He had some calls to make. This was going to be a long night.
edit on 14-4-2016 by Skid Mark because: (no reason given)

posted on Apr, 14 2016 @ 04:35 PM
a reply to: Skid Mark

Wow Skid!

The characters story line, the build up to climax.

You got feelings of sadness going at the loss of his wife...I felt his apprehension and then his anger at the discovery of his wife.

Great job!

You ARE quite a writer!

posted on Apr, 14 2016 @ 04:39 PM
a reply to: TNMockingbird
Thank you. It just came all at once. I was actually surprised.

posted on Apr, 14 2016 @ 05:12 PM
a reply to: Skid Mark

Another nice one!!!
Bird are you being bad again.
Nice build up for the Climax

posted on Apr, 14 2016 @ 05:21 PM
A very good story! And very well written!

posted on Apr, 14 2016 @ 05:33 PM
a reply to: Skid Mark

I really dug this one man, I'm a sucker for a good revenge story. Great work.

posted on Apr, 14 2016 @ 05:34 PM
a reply to: Quantum12
Thanks. I'm glad you liked it.

posted on Apr, 14 2016 @ 05:35 PM
a reply to: Errollorre
Thanks! I had a lot of fun writing it.

posted on Apr, 14 2016 @ 05:36 PM
a reply to: CagliostroTheGreat
Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

posted on Apr, 14 2016 @ 06:04 PM
Well Done Skid.
I love the flow it is easy to read because it catches ones attention combined with a great lay out.
Not to speak of the plot, that is,excellent.

posted on Apr, 14 2016 @ 06:08 PM
a reply to: WalkInSilence
Thank you. I'm glad that you enjoyed it. It was a fun story to write.

posted on Apr, 14 2016 @ 10:05 PM
a reply to: Skid Mark

Skid that was Awesome!!! You are such a good writer!!! I loved the story!

posted on Apr, 14 2016 @ 10:06 PM
a reply to: Martin75
Thank you. I'm glad that you enjoyed it.

posted on Apr, 15 2016 @ 06:37 AM
Nice one Skiddy - It wasn't Cap'n Dobey from Starsky and Hutch was it?? LOL


posted on Apr, 15 2016 @ 11:27 AM
a reply to: Gordi The Drummer

I'm glad you liked it. I don't know who that is lol. That's not a show my parents watched when I was a kid.

posted on Apr, 23 2016 @ 08:10 AM
a reply to: Skid Mark

Is it moved?

posted on Apr, 23 2016 @ 11:04 AM
a reply to: Quantum12
They were supposed to pin it like the others have been so that when you hit the recent button in the forum it's near the top with the other contest entries. I guess they didn't get to it yet.

posted on Apr, 23 2016 @ 11:06 AM
a reply to: Skid Mark

Oh I am sure they will soon!

posted on Apr, 24 2016 @ 02:27 PM
a reply to: Skid Mark
That was a great read! Very nicely done.

You said you were surprised by it. You know, it's amazing how often the good stories tend to do that: they surprise the writer. I've puzzled over the whys and wherefores of that for years: just about any story I've ever written that turned out even half-decent, never really went quite the way I originally thought it would. It makes me think that perhaps we have these stories within us and complete, but we need to find them and bring them out into the world.

posted on Apr, 24 2016 @ 05:39 PM
a reply to: JustMike
Thank you!

I don't know how it is with you but for most of my stories it's like watching a movie in my mind and I write down what I see. Other times, it's like somebody is telling me a story in my mind and I write down what I hear. Stephen King often writes about a collective unconscious where all stories are, a well of sorts, and people who are in tune enough with it go down to the well and dip their bucket in and what comes out are stories and novels. I can see what he's talking about. It's a wild ride though. It's something I enjoy. I love it when a story takes on a life of it's own. I love seeing the end result. Sometimes I'm able to capture everything as perfectly as I can, sometimes not. Either way, it's fun.

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