Song I wrote titled "I"

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posted on May, 16 2013 @ 06:48 PM
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Hope you guys enjoy this one...Lyrics on the bottom.

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**LYRICS**

I wanna trust your words
Written in a verse
But the melody's a curse

I wanna trust your lips
But there's poison in your kiss
And it hits me like a fist

Why do I wait
What do you say we do?
Go all the way
Or get all away from you

I don't feel it
I don't love you
So let's quit this now

I don't need it
I don't want you
It's been quiet for a while

I thought we were a team
But I'm holding up this beam
There's nothing to redeem

Now I see us divided into two
Us is me and you
Our purple's red and blue

Why do I wait
What do you say we do?
Go all the way
Or get all away from you

I don't feel it
I don't love you
So let's quit this now

I don't need it
I don't want you
It's been quiet for a while

I don't feel it
I don't love you
So let's quit this now

I don't need it
I don't want you
It's been quiet for a while




posted on May, 16 2013 @ 07:05 PM
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I like it. It's got a Phil Collins retro eighties feel to it. Nice one



posted on May, 16 2013 @ 07:10 PM
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Good job Alex...
I like it bro...I like your voice.

Exactly how I feel at the moment. I don't need it, I don't want you...I'm going to listen to this a couple of more times and sing with it.



posted on May, 16 2013 @ 07:31 PM
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reply to post by Johnny76
 


Thanks! After I wrote this song, I realized the piano part kind of had that feel too!



posted on May, 16 2013 @ 07:31 PM
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reply to post by PurpleVortex
 


Hope it helps with whatever you're facing man! Thanks for listening and singing with it!



posted on May, 17 2013 @ 12:02 AM
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Beautiful as always!!!!
You should be famous. You have the talent.




Put the code after the = sign and get rid of the & sign and everything after.



posted on May, 17 2013 @ 12:08 AM
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The link is

www.youtube.com...

see the www.youtube.com...
you don't need any of that

when you hit reply, look for the 'vid youtube' button then click on that. It will open a tiny box where you copy your code then click ok and it will appear in your reply.
put in the 2IMxUrwanHI

get rid of the &feature=youtu.be

Now you try.
edit on 17-5-2013 by Night Star because: (no reason given)



posted on May, 17 2013 @ 01:33 AM
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Very well done! I've written poetry for many years but I always found song writing very challenging. You're a natural. This could be a hit song.



posted on May, 17 2013 @ 02:58 AM
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posted on May, 17 2013 @ 02:58 AM
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reply to post by Night Star
 


There we go! didnt realize those buttons were there! thnks!



posted on May, 17 2013 @ 02:59 AM
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reply to post by LoneCloudHopper2
 


Thank you! I love poetry as well and that's where I started. As I grew older I kept trying to mix words and music together. It's been a long road and it's still going. It's crazy listening to my older material and comparing it to now.



posted on May, 17 2013 @ 03:48 PM
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Realized I put in an older edit of the song Whoops!



posted on May, 17 2013 @ 06:15 PM
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Originally posted by Ptenjakin
reply to post by Night Star
 


There we go! didnt realize those buttons were there! thnks!


I didn't either at first. You're very welcome.





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