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posted on Feb, 8 2013 @ 06:08 PM
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Personality divided.

The battle has been ignited.

She has metallic red hair,

With skin so fare;

She is like a porcelain doll.

Clementine has a wicked glare.

Eyes so mean being emerald green.

Where did you come from?

From within she replies.

She quickly takes over,

With such a calmness.

She is extremely clever,

And is also heartless.

Continue this battle til it it settled.

Don't know how this shall be handled.

Split personality.

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I just wanted to share. Judgment is inappropriate.

Thanks and be kind. I'm a sensitive lady.

Peace and love
~nat the blue eyed cat~
edit on 8-2-2013 by natalia because: (no reason given)




posted on Feb, 8 2013 @ 06:16 PM
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Interesting premise and unique aspect.



posted on Feb, 8 2013 @ 06:43 PM
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Nat, I can see a great deal of improvement with each new poem that you write. It is apparent how much effort and depth you're putting into your writing. I hope it is as much a source of catharsis (emotional release) for you as poetry is for me.

The only nitpick I have is this: the reader needs to see an example of what makes Clementine clever and heartless.

Many on ATS say "pics or it didn't happen!"...unfortunately, or perhaps fortunately, the same is true for poetry. Each claim must be backed up with a descriptive picture.

I can't wait to see where you'll go with your poetry, Nat
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posted on Feb, 8 2013 @ 10:21 PM
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I'm judging you anyway, that's pretty good . Narcoleptic Buddha is right, your stuff is improving .

I'm slightly freaked out about your picking the name "Clementine" though , a long time ago a search for an anime character named Saya oddly led me to a deep space satellite named Clementine 1 , as I was looking over the stats for Clementine (on JPLs website) I got a strange message saying that they noticed what I was looking for and that I might like a website called Above Top Secret . I have no complaints , I think I was guided well that night . Absolutely true story .

But I think your starting to get a fan club here so keep it up, you really are getting good .



posted on Feb, 9 2013 @ 08:13 AM
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I like it. Its a well thought out and deep poem. The best poems to me are the real ones that come from within. The ones that are better off out than kept inside to ones self. Well done nat



posted on Feb, 9 2013 @ 11:03 AM
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Thanks friend.
I'm already working on another poem describing Clementine to the fullest but not wanting to get to personal on here. Wish I had seen that I messed up on one of the lines by saying 'it it' when it was supposed to be 'it is'
Oh well.

Thanks for the feedback. Always appreciated.

Peace and love
~nat the cat~

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posted on Feb, 9 2013 @ 11:07 AM
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That is a very interesting story thudpuddy.

Coincidence? Hmmm..... *shoulder shrug*

Thanks for judging me
I am glad you liked.

peace and love
~nat the cat~



posted on Feb, 9 2013 @ 11:10 AM
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Thanks doc. And yes they are coming from within.

I really appreciate you dropping me a comment that you liked it.

Peace and love
~nat the cat~



posted on Feb, 9 2013 @ 07:11 PM
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The duality of our natures, well put, the battle of dark and light. Lovely.



posted on Feb, 12 2013 @ 08:52 PM
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Well done natalia! Someone here mentioned about you are starting to get a following...a fan club, so to speak. Yep, so true. I've been a "fan" since I read your first post when I joined and came to this forum. Keep on keepin on with your great words spoken from the heart and words of wisdom and depth. Blessings. ^j^



posted on Mar, 4 2013 @ 02:36 PM
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Originally posted by natalia
Personality divided.

The battle has been ignited.

She has metallic red hair,

With skin so fare;

She is like a porcelain doll.

Clementine has a wicked glare.

Eyes so mean being emerald green.

Where did you come from?

From within she replies.

She quickly takes over,

With such a calmness.

She is extremely clever,

And is also heartless.

Continue this battle til it it settled.

Don't know how this shall be handled.

Split personality.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

I just wanted to share. Judgment is inappropriate.

Thanks and be kind. I'm a sensitive lady.

Peace and love
~nat the blue eyed cat~
edit on 8-2-2013 by natalia because: (no reason given)





Judgment is inappropriate.


Judging

I love this one Nat, too personal to mess with
Genius personified
Love and hugs
Cody



posted on Mar, 4 2013 @ 03:26 PM
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Pretty well rounded you are!

I like your short stories and now your poetry as well.

Thanks for sharing this, very creative.

Blend57



posted on Mar, 11 2013 @ 10:31 PM
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Thanks Natalia for sharing from your heart. Introspection is difficult and can be scary sometimes but it is often the secret garden of our creativity.









 
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