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(MSSS)- One of Those Nights

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posted on Jan, 14 2004 @ 10:46 AM
One of Those Nights

Barely anyone comes to the Sixth Street Bridge anymore. Hell, most people avoid even crossing it. I guess its no wonder more people have committed suicide on this bridge alone than in any other place in New York. Its a gloomy place, a small stone bridge over one of the canals that funnel rainwater out into the bay. Even during the summer, the little river is a good twenty feet deep. I like it, though. It has a quiet, sad aura about it. I come here to think. I fancy sometimes that I can see the faces of the bridges victims gurgling down below. At first, every night Id come by and look down into the swirling water, only to have the locals call the cops. Nowadays, they just let me be.

I pulled my long black coat around me as the drizzle fell around me. It was just one of those nights I had to be out on the bridge- one of the ones where I feel obligated to stand there- fog crawling around my ankles and obscuring the buildings on either side. I was as happy and peaceful as I get, watching drops of water tumble off of me and down into the murk below. People just cant understand why I stand out there, the place where God knows how many people have ended their own lives. I cant either. Its like Im standing vigil for the lot of them, just to prove that someone remembers; someone cares.

Footsteps sounded as hard boots struck and slurred against the asphalt. It wasn't common to find someone out at this hour, particularly in this stretch of town.. The person continued to advance, steps scraping as they slowed down. I figure theyd seen me by this point, but I didnt show it. I just kept looking down into that stream, wondering at life and death each as wholes. There was a definite pause in the tandem they had seen me for sure by now then a sudden rise. They stopped ten feet to my left, probably mirroring my pose. I finally looked over at the impolite intruder who had interrupted my thoughts.

A young woman no more than a few years older than me leant on the barrier and looked out on the scenery I saw almost every night. She had long, light brown hair with red streaks. It cascaded about her shoulders, flecked with drops of water. Each one caught and reflected some of the meager light. Her quiet demeanor was reflected in the pits of her eyes as she turned towards me. Each of the bright green orbs seemed to be livid with pain as each seemed to dance like the blackened streams of tears that ran down her pale skin. Dark red lips managed to curl into a lopsided half smile.
Hey, she called out quietly.

For lack of any better ideas, I nodded back a greeting. Staring at her, I tried to unravel the mystery of why she was here. Dark pants and a red shirt, both soaked to the bone graced her lithe figure. It wasnt hard to see the outline of her bra as her clothes clung to her. She shivered, whether from the chill or something else I couldnt say.
Not here to kill yourself, are you? I barked gruffly, trying to maintain a sense of territoriality. She just shook her head.
Doesnt matter.
Yeah, it does. Every time someone takes a leap from here, I have to deal with the badges for another night.
How many
Twenty-eight this year.
Not a bright thing to do, kiddo.

At that last comment, she smirked. It was more of a twinge than anything else and soon vanished.
Sowhy are YOU out here? Gonna take a leap of faith? she responded, trying to put me onto the defensive. I just shook my head.
This placethis place means something to me.
Someone you know?
No. The people I never did.

An amicable silence fell between us as the rain poured on. I didnt know what to say. Apparently, neither did she. It wasnt hard to tell the black running down her cheeks spoke volumes of her despair. I made a bid on it.
Boyfriend trouble? I tried.
Not anymore.
Wanna talk about it?
Once again, does it matter?
Hey, Im just trying to make sure you dont end up with a toe tag.
Your concern is touching.
It better be, cause its all Im gonna spare until you get friendly.

She halved the distance between us. I tried not to react, but I was shocked. I hadnt expected something so forthright. I reciprocated, halving the distance once more. We stood like that for some time, not saying a word. Finally, she spoke.
Have you ever wondered if anyone cared about you at all?
No, namely because I knew that no one did from day one.
Must be lonely.
Usually, but theres nothing I can do about it.

I looked her straight in the eyes again. I could see the desperation in them, the longing for something anything- to hang on to. I saw my reflections in them. I always hated myself, namely because no matter how hard I had tried to be with a woman I always fell dead last to some pretty boy. I tried offering a shoulder to cry on, someone to laugh with, and both before I figured out that I didnt cut it. I turned back towards the comfort of the fog. I had always hated mirrors.

She saw something in me, I suppose. My mother said that the eyes were the window to the soul. Her hand reached out and found mine. It was cold, but I could feel the warmth below the soaked skin. Quietly, she murmured to me, Its a damn cold night. I dont care where I end up, as long as its not here.

I looked up, trying not to appear surprised. I expected nothing less than contempt from everyone I had ever met (looking back, I can see just how right I was), but for once I didnt see an enemy or a rival or someone out to toy with me. The best way I can describe her as that night was a kindred spirit. There was something about her, something that reached out and called to me. I dont remember why I did it, but my hand linked with hers. We walked off into the mist and drizzle together, and left the bridge and its spirits behind.


[Edited on 14-1-2004 by John bull 1]

posted on Jan, 14 2004 @ 11:14 AM
Great story, really leaves me wanting to hear more,

I love the whole concept of this story, your almost thinking she is one of the lost spirits of the bridge.

You get the whole sence of the surroundings,

I loved reading this,

posted on Jan, 14 2004 @ 02:16 PM
What a great piece of storytelling.

It has a lovely rythm which really draws the reader in.

Well,that's set a benchmark for everyone.

Welldone DE.

posted on Jan, 14 2004 @ 11:09 PM
Thanks. it means a lot to me to hear that this story is good- I've been working on it awhile. can't wait to read the other pieces. Thanks, JB1 and asala.


posted on Jan, 15 2004 @ 08:17 PM
Excellent story, DeusEx.

I haven't read your stuff for a while as I haven't really had the time - I will do so again, shortly.
I was gonna enter the competition - not much point after reading this, lol.

posted on Jan, 15 2004 @ 08:31 PM
DeusEx---Your story is captivating. Will you be adding to it soon?

So you're writing this story for a competition? It's difficult to imagine a story better than yours.

posted on Jan, 15 2004 @ 08:45 PM
link My story is good,yeah, but there are equal or better writers on ATS, and I expect them to start posting soon. FLC, you should compete none the less. I'm not as good as I seem. Really... I posted 3 or 4 junk stories before this one. This one just happened to be a favorite.

As for adding to this story, I never really thought about that. I suppose it is a possibility. I have no idea where it would go, tho.

posted on Jan, 15 2004 @ 08:49 PM
don't worry, buddy - I'm going to enter.
Just need to get my creative head on and find some inspiration - mind bending drugs, alcohol or government funded mind control experiment. Surely one of these will help lol.

posted on Jan, 20 2004 @ 09:34 AM
think I told you already, but you had me on that bridge with you. Your story is well-written and totally entralling. You got my vote

posted on Jan, 23 2004 @ 12:20 AM
Dude that was awesome.

10/10 couldn't of made it better.

It makes me depressed though, I want a girl..

posted on Jan, 23 2004 @ 02:51 AM
Thanks. My work means a lot to me.

ZeratualKalashnikov, I'm sure you'll get a girl soon. Hey, if I can get one...

That, and check out my other story.


posted on Jan, 24 2004 @ 02:20 AM
I like story, but what is the point?

Is this the first chapter or is this the only chapter?

I hope you add to this, I like the way you take us to the place.


posted on Jan, 28 2004 @ 11:42 AM
Good made the scene and characters and general mood of it come alive, which is not easy to do. Hope to read more of your stuff...

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