Poetry anyone?

Wasteland in the Starlight

In a land of fire and ice
The frozen wasteland calls
Its mists ready to blanket the night
As the final darkness falls.

Come to me my children
Calls the voice upon the breeze
Follow it but be wary
For it may bring you to your knees.

We must walk upon this path
And tread its length so cold
For to reach its bitter end
Is a victory untold.

Ash and smoke upon the air
Lightning lighting up your hair
A wasteland made into a place
Where all that’s seen is fair.

The stars above still shine
And will forever on
Until the passing of the last
When all but love is gone.


Any comments-criticisms appreciated. Thanks for reading

In a land of fire and ice
The frozen wasteland calls
Its mists ready to blanket the night
As the final darkness falls.

Come to me my children
Calls the voice upon the breeze
Follow it but be wary
For it may bring you to your knees.

i love this part of the poem, i love the way it is written and the mysterious feel to it (thats what i get from reading it) excellent work, i would like to see more

i love this part of the poem, i love the way it is written and the mysterious feel to it (thats what i get from reading it) excellent work, i would like to see more

Thankyou very much! I am so glad you enjoyed it.

I am hoping to do a bit more writing in the near future.

"We must walk upon this path
And tread its length so cold
For to reach its bitter end
Is a victory untold. "

I love the imagery used here, I got the chills when I read it. I picture a man looking like Jim Carrey on that Lemony Snickket movie telling this story. Good job