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I need a title for my poem!

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posted on May, 28 2014 @ 02:22 PM
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Written over thirty years ago, and I still can't decide what to title it.

My name is Forever;
I was born tomorrow
On the seventh of Never,
In a land

Where no one may go,
For it is a world
That only I can know...

Where my eyes can hear,
And my ears can see
Where my heart touches all
That is eternity;

Where tomorrows' dreams
Belongs to the past;
Where memories now lie,
Asleep at last,

And though I may be here
For life and a day,
Few will know
When I've gone away.


Any suggestions would be appreciated.




posted on May, 28 2014 @ 02:30 PM
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a reply to: nugget1

Born Again, Rose Lenses, Good Morning.



posted on May, 28 2014 @ 02:34 PM
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I think any title idea you get from an outside source would not be sufficient for your work. Think about what the inspiration was, and start from there. Even if it was just some words that you heard while sitting outside in the spring, or listening to the radio.

From the inspiration you will find the title,
or just leave it 'untitled' by nugget1



posted on May, 28 2014 @ 02:34 PM
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Forevermore



posted on May, 28 2014 @ 02:42 PM
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a reply to: nugget1

"The Nothing"

or

"Untitled"

or

"Musings of a Drunky Drunk" No offense.


That's all I have.



posted on May, 28 2014 @ 02:43 PM
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Nice poem ..may I suggest . A Past Breeze ? a reply to: nugget1



posted on May, 28 2014 @ 02:46 PM
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a reply to: nugget1

Today is forever.
After reading your poem,thats what hit my mind.



posted on May, 28 2014 @ 02:50 PM
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Astroart- Thank you; those are all good!

youdidntseeme VERY good advice! Can't remember what prompted the poem, though; too much life at one time!


UnBreakable I like that one too!

ScientiaFortisDefendit There's one in every crowd......
100% abstainer, so the drunky-drunk is out. I did enjoy your humor, though; and maybe 'nothing' is what it should be!



posted on May, 28 2014 @ 02:51 PM
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originally posted by: DrumsRfun
a reply to: nugget1

Today is forever.
After reading your poem,thats what hit my mind.


"The Moment" or something. It is where we exist, yet has no dimension, only a past and a future. Your post made me think of that.



posted on May, 28 2014 @ 02:55 PM
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You guys, it's working!! "Past Breeze " and "Today is forever " and all the others are triggering more, like " the Blinded Heart", or .....?



posted on May, 28 2014 @ 02:58 PM
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Journey of a Soul.



posted on May, 28 2014 @ 03:00 PM
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After reading your poem I though of Peter Pan's Neverland...you could expand on that.



posted on May, 28 2014 @ 03:12 PM
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originally posted by: openyourmind1262
Journey of a Soul.

I like that!



Today is forever.

And this!



posted on May, 28 2014 @ 03:29 PM
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"I Am"

Your line "Where tomorrows' dreams
Belongs to the past; " sounds awkward- "Where tomorrows' dream/Belongs to the past," or "Where tomorrows' dreams/Belong to the past," would make it flow more smoothly.

Great poem though, I was pleasantly surprised!
edit on 15u1503pmb14America/Chicago by Hushabye because: (no reason given)



posted on May, 28 2014 @ 03:30 PM
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infinite redux.



posted on May, 28 2014 @ 04:07 PM
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Nice, I like it. It reminds me a little of how Scott McMicken writes some of his lyrics for Dr. Dog. It's nonsensical I guess?? Not sure of the correct term, but yeah, maybe the title should be similar. Eternity's End or something like that.



posted on May, 28 2014 @ 05:02 PM
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a reply to: nugget1

Forever, not ever.
or,
Poetry emotion.
or,
Today is yesterdays tomorrow.
or,
Alive in my deadhead.

I think the first one is quite good, its got the first and last lines covered...
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posted on May, 28 2014 @ 06:25 PM
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a reply to: nugget1

I really like this!! Great job and thanks for sharing this.
A title isn't necessary for every poem. I really like some of the suggestions. A lot of times I will title a poem with the first line or take one word from the first line



Have you picked one yet?



posted on May, 28 2014 @ 06:35 PM
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originally posted by: nugget1
Written over thirty years ago, and I still can't decide what to title it.

My name is Forever;


Any suggestions would be appreciated.


Hi nugget1!!
That was awesome!

I would call it..."Forever".


jacygirl



posted on May, 28 2014 @ 07:57 PM
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Hushabye

Thank you; you are so right!



RoScoLaz




Samilton




SecretKnowledge


Thank you for the compliments and suggestions! They're all great!




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