River Falls (Poem)

At the end of my rope with no nets below.
with the flow drifting along, can I just let go?

Meander like a river, soon engulfed within this ocean
Devotions that are unhindered, with no lack of emotion

Peace falls over the absolute stillness of tranquility
Surrender then tumble into a pure blissful serenity.

I am one, whole and no longer numb
Today in a way, I will not succumb

Not with Anger, nor grief, or a false belief
Strife of life blows away carried like a leaf

I float, lift and twist in every degree
As something so gently
settles inside of me...

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Hey abeverage!
That was clever, beautiful...and sad.
The blue words were like another poem within the poem.
S&F
Hope you're just being poetic, and aren't really sad.
*hugs*
jacygirl

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Hey Jacygirl!
Thank you! Yes there is a poem within a poem...

Sad?
Hmmm maybe it was too deep? Or quite possibly too shallow? Perhaps I am all wet, but maybe, just maybe it was all about a river and a leaf...

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Ahhh....I see.
Okay, is it about a particular river? A special river? Or just your everyday generic water running one way kinda deal?
Are there rapids?
Are there fish?

Ok I'll stop. I'm just jealous because my poems are never "pretty" like that.
jacygirl

I absolutely loved it,and curiously it totally resonates with how I feel today.

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Jacy...don't be jealous I am no word smith, and of course there is a fish a very fickle fish, the river is my heart...

Or it is just some ribbon of water filled with trout that flows through my city! LOL

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I am hoping a calm feeling? I am glad you liked it! Oh and I like trees too...

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that had a real depth, and I really enjoy the two levels of poetry. As a musician, I can "hear" that set to music....... 3/4 time, fairly speedy, with the percussion on an off-syncopated beat. Very cool.

You say a lot in very little.
You are not a leaf on the stream (intuition)........ you quarter upcurrent even when it's the most difficult tack.

Really pleasing work.

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Always enjoy your poems, you have a way of making people feel and hear your words. Beautiful as always

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This is groovy , I had a dream the other night , the night of the waterfalls at Uluru , in the dream , I was standing opposite a clear
waterfall , beautiful clear water , then a dream came over the top and said to me Remember this part . It was strong ,almost rude lol.
So a dream within a dream about a waterfall. Thanks for the poetry , cheers 1%

argentus
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that had a real depth, and I really enjoy the two levels of poetry. As a musician, I can "hear" that set to music....... 3/4 time, fairly speedy, with the percussion on an off-syncopated beat. Very cool.

You say a lot in very little.
You are not a leaf on the stream (intuition)........ you quarter upcurrent even when it's the most difficult tack.

Really pleasing work.

Wow to music? I am not very musically inclined. But if you want it, it is yours just give me credit and share your work with me!

Jennyfrenzy
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Always enjoy your poems, you have a way of making people feel and hear your words. Beautiful as always

That is a very gracious compliment and one I have not heard before! I like that my words are felt and heard...

But sometimes I go from a Whisper to a Scream...................................

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I will work with your amazing poem as I have time, with only this change: If I make something I like, I'll give it to you, and you can give me credit. Your words are awesome and complex and there is a cadence that emerges, the more one reads or sings the words aloud.

I can imagine a double or trebled vocal on the blue words, which could then form the final verse. I see this as the chorus:

I am one, whole and no longer numb
Today in a way, I will not succumb

Wonderful.

argentus
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I will work with your amazing poem as I have time, with only this change: If I make something I like, I'll give it to you, and you can give me credit. Your words are awesome and complex and there is a cadence that emerges, the more one reads or sings the words aloud.

I can imagine a double or trebled vocal on the blue words, which could then form the final verse. I see this as the chorus:

I am one, whole and no longer numb
Today in a way, I will not succumb

Wonderful.

The Chorus!
I LIKE!