~Introspection of a Shadow~ [SS2019]

Thoughts linger half formed in my brain
Piecing themselves together according to
no apparent rhyme or reason.
Its hard to trust thoughts that
have no tangible origin, only
the weight of truth lingering despite
my attempts to drive them off with
feeble mental wards which
i compose without any excellence.

a reply to: LucidWarrior

Very nicely done, Lucid! It's hard to write a story with so few words and I'd say you did very well with this.

a reply to: LucidWarrior

A challenge with so few words and you pulled this off beautifully. Poetic and intriguing.

thanks you two. I probably wil write the other submission, simply because i wasnt able to fit the entry into one submission- this is the... framework of paranoia but i wasnt able to fit the actual paranoia in

a reply to: LucidWarrior


Some thoughts are indeed rather pernicious.
You caught the essence of the sneaky little buggers and the difficulty in banishing them really well,

a reply to: SprocketUK

that was my intention- i am pleased it was conveyed well

a reply to: LucidWarrior

first time i read it it seemed like the thoughts came from 'outside' the speaker? like input from someone/thing/place else?

a reply to: chris_stibrany

yes ^^ check out my second submission, the spiritual sequal to this one, entitled "invaded"