originally posted by: shlaw
A sweeping epic that leaves one feeling that there is still a world more yet to be revealed.
Your descriptive skills are on point as well as your sense of character development and the intrigue it brings their believable interactions.
! Thanks for this ^^^! That is exactly one of the things I was going for. An air of mystery and the feeling there's more to
discover. I have to say I find the same feeling in your story D'Arc. I get the idea of what the world is, but the question is how
did it end up that way? Why are they called Prepoc
Your compliments on my description skills are humbling - thank you!
If there is one complaint it's that the story begins rather slow. It is my uneducated opinion that a story should be started with a hook that
keeps the reader hanging while other details are filled in afterwards. That being said, there are many successful novels that don't do that, so what
do I know.
I can definitely see that. I will say this: at its deepest core, Falling
is actually a love story. It is set against the backdrop of a
vast conflict of good and evil, journeys of faith, and the idea of standing on principle and truth.
Also, the finished work would begin with a prologue, which has something of a hook. Perhaps I shall post that at some point, to see what you all
think of it in this thread.
I am in full editing mode on a future e-book so I feel compelled to ask the following:
Do you consider this the final version of our story (not including the odd error) that might appear in your finished novel - meaning the order of
events, details included/excluded, etc.
Which authors do you read most and do you think you are emulating them here to some (any) degree?
How many estimated words would be in the final work?
Barring input by an actual editor (as opposed to myself), yes, at least for this arc it would be pretty much what I would submit to a publisher for
consideration, minor tweaks and technical bug fixes notwithstanding, of course.
Which authors? Good question, but a long one. I would say there are a few authors whose voices I enjoy tremendously, and therefore I suspect their
influence can be found in my writing if you look hard enough. The first is probably Robert Jordan, author of The Wheel of Time
depth of world-building is almost unparalleled in the epic fantasy genre, and I am willing to state that in my opinion, the first 5 books of The
Wheel of Time
are the best epic fantasy writing I have ever read.
Second would be Brandon Sanderson, who is the man that finished the last 2 1/2 books of The Wheel of Time
after Jordan passed away. He brought
back an urgency and sense of action that was sometimes lacking in the middle of the series. His Mistborn
series is wonderful for its
protagonist - a slender young woman named Vin - and his system of magic, slowly revealed throughout the series. He proves the value of a consistent
set of rules for magic use in a fantasy series.
Third is of course J. R. R. Tolkien, from whom we get the vastness of time and history and the value of creating a mythos that is consistent and
underlies the story.
I have read a few books of George R. R. Martin's A Song of Ice and Fire
, which the HBO series "Game of Thrones" is based upon. Martin writes
dirt and ugliness very well. What I mean by that is that the characters in A Song of Ice and Fire
are mostly not beautiful and not perfect.
This is very difficult but very important for me to remember, because as I identify strongly with my characters it's hard for me to make them less
than perfect. But it is our imperfections and how we deal with them that make us human - and therein lies the drama.
Similarly, I owe a not to J. K. Rowling for her Harry Potter
series. Her entertaining whimsy and dialogue is so engaging to read it reminds me
that you do not need pages of description to convey important information to the reader. Also, the character of Severus Snape was wonderfully written
and has shown me what power there is in ambiguity and misdirection.
I also owe a nod to Lloyd Alexander, author of The Chronicles of Prydain
, for his wonderful YA stories of Taran the orphan in the kingdom of
Prydain that was remarkably similar in geography and legend to Wales. Mr. Alexander sucked me into the world of fantasy from which I have never
Ken Follett, Jr. is another influence. Mr. Follett has a magnificent (and sinister) gift for beautifully describing and giving life to his characters
hopes, dreams, and ambitions, then brutally and mercilessly crushing them with extreme prejudice.
Finally, I should also list the Bible. A theme in Falling
are two journeys of faith. I draw from my own experience and the Bible in
constructing those elements of the story. It's also a rich trove of stories, situations, and I admit, names.
Now all that having been said, whether I am actually emulating any of those masters of storytelling remains to be seen. I feel much like a child
writing in crayon compared the likes of those authors I have listed.
Again, great job!
Now back to editing my book, which by the way,
your descriptive prowess has made feel like a
desolate desert to me.
Don't try to write with my voice or anyone else's, shlaw. Write with your own voice - however that comes out. Your story is engaging and
interesting, drawing me on to dig out the nuggets that you leave behind. Don't sell yourself short - you can write, my friend. Keep writing and keep
OMGosh this turned out long - SORRY!!
edit on 4-17-2017 by PrairieShepherd because: Because I'm retentive.