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Tale to Tell (poem)

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posted on Dec, 10 2013 @ 06:49 AM
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I have a little tale to tell,
A story I hold dear.
I've never told it very well,
But will try to do so here.

It was many years ago,
The night of Christmas Eve.
I was driving on icy snow,
And my car started to weave.

Off the bridge, down the bank,
To the frozen depths below.
Into the river the car sank,
And the water started to flow.

This was it, I'm truly done,
I knew my time was near.
Someone help, please, someone!
I knew no one could hear.

I sat there watching the water rise,
Felt the cold slip over my skin.
Tears were flowing from my eyes,
As it made it past my chin.

I looked up and saw the man,
Brake the glass with a bar.
He reached inside, took my hand,
And pulled me out of the car.

Not much stuck with me about that night,
But I do remember two things.
When he left he walked through the light,
And I could swear that he had wings,

The police said someone called in my plight,
Told them where I would be.
My car had crashed well out of sight,
No one would have ever found me.

Who was the man that saved me,
That is something I'll never know
On that fateful Christmas eve,
In all that ice and snow

Every Christmas I thank the man,
who saved my life that night.
I give help to all I can,
And try to live life right.

Thanks,
Blend57




posted on Dec, 10 2013 @ 11:52 AM
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Is this something you wrote Blend?



posted on Dec, 10 2013 @ 12:03 PM
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reply to post by VoidWalker
 


Yes. I am trying my hand at poetry as it is very challenging for me

Hopefully it came out o.k.
What do ya think?
edit on 10-12-2013 by blend57 because: (no reason given)



posted on Dec, 10 2013 @ 12:22 PM
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I can honestly say I love it. I would love to read more if you have any if you feel like sharing! Truly a good read I believe!



posted on Dec, 10 2013 @ 12:32 PM
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I think that you were able to tell an entire story of events with emotions involved in so few words. I am not sure what or how you did it but you managed to create that poem with power and emotions that were just awesome. Well done sir/ma'am? lol



posted on Dec, 10 2013 @ 12:41 PM
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VoidWalker
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I think that you were able to tell an entire story of events with emotions involved in so few words. I am not sure what or how you did it but you managed to create that poem with power and emotions that were just awesome. Well done sir/ma'am? lol



That's why it's so challenging for me. I have a hard time using so little words to say things. I have one more I can post, I really only started doing poems about two weeks ago. Thanks for letting me know you liked it. I truly appreciate it.

Thanks,
Blend57



posted on Dec, 10 2013 @ 12:47 PM
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I would agree with the other person saying this poem captured the right amount of emotion in such simple words. It's very good blend. You do have a knack for poetry. I feel poetry dwells within us all and you just have to tap into it..

SnF good job.

I like it. Is this a true story?? Just curious..
-nat



posted on Dec, 10 2013 @ 01:00 PM
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Mostly true, except the Christmas eve part. I was actually driving to work in the wee hours of the morning when it happened.

Glad you liked it! I will be posting the poem I shared with you through pm last week, I just finished it. Let me know what you think.

Thanks,
Blend57



posted on Dec, 10 2013 @ 01:12 PM
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Well I really hope you keep me updated when you put out another.



posted on Dec, 10 2013 @ 03:14 PM
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Another great poem. I like short stories, But if I'm honest its the poems what I like the most. And you sure are good at them. Well done



posted on Dec, 10 2013 @ 03:32 PM
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Very nice. In my humble opinion... that should earn you a 'Writer's' title



posted on Dec, 10 2013 @ 04:25 PM
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TheDoctor46
Another great poem. I like short stories, But if I'm honest its the poems what I like the most. And you sure are good at them. Well done


Thank you. As I said, I just started writing them and its really nice to see what people think. I'm very happy you liked it.

Thanks,
Blend57



posted on Dec, 10 2013 @ 04:30 PM
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redoubt
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Very nice. In my humble opinion... that should earn you a 'Writer's' title




Thanks for saying that! But that would be too much pressure!! lol. I don't care about the title. I just like to write, no matter if it turns out good or bad.

Thanks again for letting me know you liked it.


Thanks,
Blend57



posted on Dec, 11 2013 @ 02:54 PM
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Thanks for saying that! But that would be too much pressure!! lol. I don't care about the title. I just like to write, no matter if it turns out good or bad.


There's no pressure here... you contribute when and where you find the path.

Words are like gems and when sorted to things like yours here, carry value.

Just my opinion



posted on Dec, 12 2013 @ 11:24 AM
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blend57
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Mostly true, except the Christmas eve part. I was actually driving to work in the wee hours of the morning when it happened.

Glad you liked it! I will be posting the poem I shared with you through pm last week, I just finished it. Let me know what you think.

Thanks,
Blend57


That's wild blend that you experienced something like that... Well wild and truly amazing... Imo..some of us have an angel that watches over us. I've cheated death three times due to my angel 'Elias'... I know I'm not nuts either. I hold my beliefs and my experiences to be true in my heart.

I really do like the poems you have shared. Very nice work
and thanks for the message gift..that was very sweet of you



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