Ticking brain(poem)

Character throbs, a spirit yearns
Ticking brain perpetually turns

Reality halts, perceptions warp
Vessel splits a festering corpse

Plastered down with awkward chains
Enclosed whispers of a menial name

Vicious claws assembled weak
Attempt to vanish or openly retreat

Forever gliding on a hollow whirl
Image wasted like a flightless bird

The mangled journey spirals under
Left detached... forthwith no others

I wrote this last night and made some changes to some of the words today. Also it is more fun to read it in an accent.. I'm a southern gal from the states so just saying it in my own voice didn't sound good to my ears for some reason...
So I changed my accent, I read it out loud in an English accent, then a Russian accent, and then... I read it out loud like I was Dracula...
Hope you enjoy.
Peace and love
-nat the blue eyed cat-

Very vondervul! < accent noted...

reply to post by abeverage


Hah! Thanks buddy

I thought the accents made the poem sound better. And I'll tell ya, each time being Dracula was the best.
Thanks for saying it was vondervul!!

reply to post by natalia


Awesome Nat!
Reading it with the Dracula voice definitely gives it that something extra!
I tried it with a Jamaican accent too.... pretty cool, but more laid back- don't feel the same level of angst.

Keep it up little natalia!

reply to post by natalia


What a lovely read. I know English and Russian lady accents well as you know. But I'm struggling to comprehend a dracula!! ...I also did an Irish and Australian version which worked quite well to ...Its a good poem though well done.......Next time I will take the fangs out ..It just may sound better

reply to post by littled16

Haha, Jamaican mon! Nice
Thanks web mama!!

reply to post by TheDoctor46


Oh an Irish blather I bet sounded fun!! I'll have to try. And Australian yak...nice

Dracula is the best I think.. I vant to suck your blood.

Hah and yes take ya fangs out!

reply to post by natalia


Nat, I tried it with dentures out and it just lost something in the mumble. I appreciate your spirit of adventure. You continue to be a favorite! Peace my friend.

grayeagle
reply to post by natalia

 

I tried it with dentures out and it just lost something in the mumble.

Darn it!
Why didn't I think of trying that?