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Ticking brain(poem)

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posted on Dec, 4 2013 @ 12:22 PM
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Character throbs, a spirit yearns
Ticking brain perpetually turns

Reality halts, perceptions warp
Vessel splits a festering corpse

Plastered down with awkward chains
Enclosed whispers of a menial name

Vicious claws assembled weak
Attempt to vanish or openly retreat

Forever gliding on a hollow whirl
Image wasted like a flightless bird

The mangled journey spirals under
Left detached... forthwith no others

I wrote this last night and made some changes to some of the words today. Also it is more fun to read it in an accent.. I'm a southern gal from the states so just saying it in my own voice didn't sound good to my ears for some reason...
So I changed my accent, I read it out loud in an English accent, then a Russian accent, and then... I read it out loud like I was Dracula...

Hope you enjoy.
Peace and love
-nat the blue eyed cat-




posted on Dec, 4 2013 @ 12:29 PM
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Very vondervul! < accent noted...

edit on 4-12-2013 by abeverage because: (no reason given)



posted on Dec, 4 2013 @ 12:37 PM
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Hah! Thanks buddy


I thought the accents made the poem sound better. And I'll tell ya, each time being Dracula was the best.

Thanks for saying it was vondervul!!



posted on Dec, 4 2013 @ 01:27 PM
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Awesome Nat!
Reading it with the Dracula voice definitely gives it that something extra!
I tried it with a Jamaican accent too.... pretty cool, but more laid back- don't feel the same level of angst.


Keep it up little natalia!



posted on Dec, 4 2013 @ 01:37 PM
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What a lovely read. I know English and Russian lady accents well as you know. But I'm struggling to comprehend a dracula!!
...I also did an Irish and Australian version which worked quite well to
...Its a good poem though well done.......Next time I will take the fangs out
..It just may sound better



posted on Dec, 4 2013 @ 01:46 PM
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Haha, Jamaican mon! Nice

Thanks web mama!!



posted on Dec, 4 2013 @ 01:53 PM
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Oh an Irish blather I bet sounded fun!! I'll have to try. And Australian yak...nice


Dracula is the best I think.. I vant to suck your blood.


Hah and yes take ya fangs out!



posted on Dec, 7 2013 @ 04:23 PM
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Nat, I tried it with dentures out and it just lost something in the mumble. I appreciate your spirit of adventure. You continue to be a favorite! Peace my friend.



posted on Dec, 9 2013 @ 08:02 AM
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grayeagle
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I tried it with dentures out and it just lost something in the mumble.


Darn it!
Why didn't I think of trying that?



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