Can't get out

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posted on Jan, 25 2013 @ 11:54 AM
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I'm down in a pit.

I see the light.

I can't get to it.

It's too far away.

I'm trying to climb up.

My arms are failing me.

The dirt starts caving in.

I am now suffocating.

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My heart is swelling.

My nerves won't cease.

I see you beckoning.

I have no release.


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posted on Jan, 25 2013 @ 12:04 PM
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Thank you for sharing that with us.

Well done.




posted on Jan, 25 2013 @ 12:13 PM
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Ummm......



posted on Jan, 25 2013 @ 12:19 PM
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Originally posted by usmc4hire
Ummm......


So lovely of you to stop by and give me an "ummm...."




posted on Jan, 25 2013 @ 12:20 PM
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Originally posted by beezzer
Thank you for sharing that with us.

Well done.



Thanks beezzer.

I appreciate ya.



posted on Jan, 25 2013 @ 12:21 PM
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Great writing and I can sympathize...



posted on Jan, 25 2013 @ 12:30 PM
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Nice writing nat. Keep em coming



posted on Jan, 25 2013 @ 12:33 PM
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Omoshiroi...
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posted on Jan, 25 2013 @ 12:35 PM
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off-topic post removed to prevent thread-drift


 



posted on Jan, 25 2013 @ 12:49 PM
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Originally posted by steve95988
Blah blah blah...
I dont think ATS is here for poetry


Then they wouldn't have a short stories forum, I know a few people who recite their poetry on here and it's beautiful.

You didn't have to come in here and read it, if you don't like it my friend.


Peace and love
-nat



posted on Jan, 25 2013 @ 12:51 PM
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reply to post by abeverage
 


Thanks abeverage.




posted on Jan, 25 2013 @ 12:53 PM
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Originally posted by TheDoctor46
Nice writing nat. Keep em coming


I have quite a few, but am not so sure I should
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posted on Jan, 25 2013 @ 01:43 PM
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reply to post by steve95988
 


There are other forums for you to troll in you know if you don't like this one



posted on Jan, 26 2013 @ 02:32 PM
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reply to post by natalia
 


Been there more than once , but it's usually a nightmare .

I like it , ignore the naysayers and keep em' coming .



posted on Feb, 4 2013 @ 02:31 PM
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Hi natalia, We are kindred spirits I think. We have seen life from both sides. Our hearts speak true and we share when we can. It is never wrong to speak from the heart. I try and find and read all of your writings as I "know" you...many other folks here, I "know" them too, as when people have been through the "bad" and good that life hands out, the ones with a free spirit and a good heart and a gentle soul will always be able to speak to one another and have a "knowing" for what is. Hugs and Blessings to you from a violetflameseeker.



posted on Feb, 4 2013 @ 03:21 PM
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For a quick reversal of the lines and it takes all new meaning.


Good peom, I've felt the same before.
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I stop suffocating.

The dirt stops caving in.

My arms won't fail me.

I'm trying to climb up.

It's not far away.

I see the light.

I can get to it.

I'm out of the pit.



posted on Feb, 4 2013 @ 05:31 PM
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Thanks my new friend!

I'm up and down...but aren't we all.

I've been looking into meditation, and have found relaxation, but accidentally found evil as well.

I will continue to grow.


Peace and love to you
-nat the curious cat-



posted on Feb, 4 2013 @ 05:33 PM
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Nice, thanks for the reversal.

I am climbing out, that poem was a little old, right after my mama passed on.

Thanks again.

Peace and love
-nat the weird cat-





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