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posted on Oct, 23 2004 @ 04:52 PM
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Beauty unblemished like gold in the sea,
What comes next I hope will be,
the begining of forever,
If I endeavor,
too make it forever,
the forever might never be.

[this is a series of poems I have made too reflect the feelings I have for a girl]



posted on Oct, 23 2004 @ 06:32 PM
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No one likes it?

No one at all?



posted on Oct, 24 2004 @ 12:57 PM
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Hey! Be patient. I like it. It has a good introduction. I've written poetry to girls I was infatuated with in my younger years and I can see where you're coming from.

I'd like to see more of the series of poems you've written for this special girl!



posted on Oct, 24 2004 @ 01:03 PM
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Good work,

Its got a good deepness to it, i would also like to see more of what you have, she must be a special girl


Asala



posted on Oct, 24 2004 @ 01:26 PM
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Thank you, I appricate your support.

If all the seas were ink,
and all the skys were parchment,
and all the men were scribes,
the seas would empty,
the sky would be full,
If they were too write of my feelings for you.



posted on Oct, 24 2004 @ 09:31 PM
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Originally posted by Voidmatter
Thank you, I appricate your support.

If all the seas were ink,
and all the skys were parchment,
and all the men were scribes,
the seas would empty,
the sky would be full,
If they were too write of my feelings for you.


Voidmatter,

That's deep!
I came back here to see what else you might have written for this special girl of yours.

Go on and write everything you can about your feelings to her and place them here. I'm sure the members here will be of help when they give you their opinions.

Great work on this second installment!
Can't wait to read some more!



posted on Oct, 25 2004 @ 05:19 PM
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The perfect face I will always see,
Is made in melodious harmony,
Sapphire eyes and golden hair,
make you more beatiful than any black stallion mare,
I will keep on feeling for you,
as long as your eyes shine a sapphire hue.




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