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Getting Over You [CTPWC]

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posted on Nov, 1 2012 @ 11:44 PM
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It’s a little less a burden every time.
You see, the bruises aren’t better
but the scratches are fine,
and I’ve got every intent to go onward,
mouth open, eyes wide,
letting every sensation inside.
I haven’t had time to
sweep the glass off the floor;
it’s a thing to watch out for,
those edges are hell on your feet.
And the heat is just awful,
gets worse every day.
But hey, at least this way,
you’ll never be scared.
Each time I do it I’m better prepared.

When you’re gripping the panel with your feet on the sill,
it’s a crime not to jump, if there’s space there to fill.

So you take a start, running, and out, like
bullet to space,
and your churning feet can’t keep apace,
and you’re sliding down oxygen, pumping your body through
blackness and branches, limb over limb, and
somewhere in there,
for a second,
you forget about him...
and the landing is perfect.
It’s fast,
and it’s hard,
and the impact won’t hurt you, but
the sound leaves you scarred.

And you find that you’re up, and you’re running inside,
to get back to that attic
and that bleeped-up thrill-ride,
and there’s glass in the soles of your feet,
and it’s hotter than hell,
and that last fall prepared you so well
for that split second segment of ecstacy,
wrapped in a shroud
of forgetfulness, in between concrete and cloud.

You see,
when you hurt yourself,
it’s a victimless crime.
And it’s a little less a burden every time.




posted on Nov, 1 2012 @ 11:48 PM
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Ok, pretty nervous guys. My first real thread besides my intro and it gets real personal. This one's from a decade ago in my college days. It hasn't seen the light of day. I removed a profane word, if it is unacceptable in this form, mods I apologize and I will remove the post. I wasn't sure if "bleep" was considered evading the censors :/ now I'm just rambling. Peace,



posted on Nov, 1 2012 @ 11:49 PM
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This is the "knife's edge" I was trying to emulate.

Well done. Bloody well done!

SnF



posted on Nov, 1 2012 @ 11:51 PM
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A dark place, but very real.




posted on Nov, 2 2012 @ 12:20 AM
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Wow that was amazing.I cannot write poetry lol



posted on Nov, 2 2012 @ 05:29 AM
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I read through it twice just to get the perspective of it, and it hit home the second read in.


A very well written and raw piece. S&F.



posted on Nov, 2 2012 @ 07:44 AM
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You see, when you hurt yourself, it’s a victimless crime. And it’s a little less a burden every time.






posted on Nov, 2 2012 @ 11:32 AM
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Right from the heart, and time does heal most wounds. I could feel when you wrote this it was coming from a dark place in your life. I am glad you could share this with us here, as I am sure you feel much better being able to express this, and turn that darkness into light.

Thanks for sharing!

And I hope that keep up with writing. It can really help those of us who come from these lower realms, or thoughts that help us cope, and allow us the chance to get this off our chests. While showing, even darkness can be expressed beautifully.



posted on Nov, 2 2012 @ 05:45 PM
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Originally posted by beezzer
reply to post by TheOtter
 


This is the "knife's edge" I was trying to emulate.


YES. You get it. I knew you would based on your awesome submission.

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edit on 11/2/2012 by TheOtter because: Random capital letters appearing when I type



posted on Nov, 2 2012 @ 05:49 PM
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Yes, I was afraid it might be too dark to qualify for the contest. It is supposed to be bittersweet. I think that's a fine line walked with this one! Thanks for the



posted on Nov, 2 2012 @ 08:29 PM
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Originally posted by TheOtter
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Yes, I was afraid it might be too dark to qualify for the contest. It is supposed to be bittersweet. I think that's a fine line walked with this one! Thanks for the

You hit the nail on the head, imho... S&F!



posted on Nov, 2 2012 @ 09:20 PM
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Thanks for checking it out
You could always write something from your heart and ask members for feedback. I bet folks would be willing to help if you want to try!



posted on Nov, 2 2012 @ 09:21 PM
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Thanks for reading and even taking the time to read twice. I didn't think it would be digestible all in one bite!



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