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If I Were a Murderer...
If I were a murderer…
You would be buried in the yard.
Your body rotten, your flesh decayed,
And I’d be smiling every day.
You’re lucky that I’m not
But oh, how I wished to be
I would happily chop off your head,
And laugh that you were dead.
You liked to cheat and lie,
Well, your bed is six feet deep
And you’d be laying in it now
If only I knew how.
Oh, I’m not evil, vengeful, or a killer,
It’s just that you stink so badly.
I was taught that you threw away the trash
And bury the hurtful past.
Originally posted by caladonea
reply to post by isyeye
You (obviously) are a talented writer...but I do have to question...what was your motivation and/or inspiration to write this?
edit on 1-11-2012 by caladonea because: edit
Originally posted by dontreally
I love how anything but warm admiration or approbation of this sordid and mindless piece is 'taboo'.
Well, because I am an iconoclast who get's annoyed with fawning, I will give you my two cents.
This 'poem' if you want to call it such, is vain, tawdry, and barren of any value. But most of all, it's all over the place. You start with "if I were a murderer". If you were a murderer, you'd be loathed by society, and for good reason. So why create a poem discussing some plausible "If" that is ridiculously irrelevant. In fact, it's because you have the sensibility and reason guiding you towards fruitful living and thinking and being - that is what you should say "thanks" to - that you aren't crazy. That you still walk erect and aren't led astray by the impetuosity of the animal.
So why give 'expression' to that which ultimately hurts? Vanity. Vanity, and nothing but vanity. This is an immature piece by a guy who does little thinking.
I think you miss the point of creative writing
, I and perhaps others may see the overcoming of pain
.Because I can
You were moved to have words in response