Do you remember me? [CTPWC]

Once there was a smile, a glance of acceptance over flaws now there is longing for the lost embrace, the laughter, a knowing joy the anticipation of connection. Now there is the cold damp wind of reality which was held off with all manor of futile distractions.

Once there was a field, a place of clandestine rendezvous to steal a moment in time. It was ours before there were others when one plus one equaled one. The intrusive crushing realization that all is broken and dances. Cool Jeweled evenings of our past play like reruns on a broken screen of despair.

Once there was understanding and willingness now the image in the mirror is unknown and unrecognizable even to ourselves. Lost and alone in a forest of friends. There is a whisper. 'You are not truly alone' Somewhere in time it has begun all over again.

Do you remember me?

nope...
2nd line right?

reply to post by SLAYER69


Nice job, buddy!

Bittersweet.

SnF

Originally posted by steve95988
nope...
2nd line right?

Right.

Originally posted by beezzer
Nice job, buddy!

Bittersweet.

SnF

I appreciate the nod.
Good luck

reply to post by SLAYER69


As always Slayer! Great work! Its nice to come back and see some of the older core members still at it here!
Well written my friend! SnF from me good sir.

This could have a few different meanings.. Depending on who reads it, and where they are at in their lives..
This is the hallmark of a gifted writer

reply to post by SLAYER69


Slayer, could you explain what you said in a few sentences, I don't really get it

reply to post by Jauk3


A Lost love

Someone in repose remembering better times as being a couple with that love and being tempered by the fact that it's all in the unrecoverable past while being consoled that somewhere in time those two are meeting for the very first time....

A perspective of mine

reply to post by SLAYER69


I really liked this story Slayer...star and flag for you!

Originally posted by SLAYER69
Once there was a smile, a glance of acceptance over flaws now there is longing for the lost embrace, the laughter, a knowing joy the anticipation of connection. Now there is the cold damp wind of reality which was held off with all manor of futile distractions.

Once there was a field, a place of clandestine rendezvous to steal a moment in time. It was ours before there were others when one plus one equaled one. The intrusive crushing realization that all is broken and dances. Cool Jeweled evenings of our past play like reruns on a broken screen of despair.

Once there was understanding and willingness now the image in the mirror is unknown and unrecognizable even to ourselves. Lost and alone in a forest of friends. There is a whisper. 'You are not truly alone' Somewhere in time it has begun all over again.

Do you remember me?

You Slay me. Brilliant!

Well written SLAYER.Very poignant.

reply to post by mamabeth


I actually wrote a much better longer version of that many moons ago to somebody special
This is a horribly watered down version due to too much time having passed

reply to post by zysin5


Talk about a blast from the past.
Great contribution by the way.

Originally posted by zysin5
This could have a few different meanings.. Depending on who reads it, and where they are at in their lives..
This is the hallmark of a gifted writer

I'm sorry I had your unedited reply open in another tab. Didn't see this edit.
Thank you I appreciate the feedback.

When I was writing [Based on an old one I once wrote I was hoping for that]

Originally posted by AgentX09
Well written SLAYER.Very poignant.

Thank you for the feedback,

reply to post by SLAYER69


Reminds me of Adam and Eve, the way things used to be. The best prose can be interpreted many ways, as you so carefully show us.

Well done. Flagged.

I can remember the innocence of love, yes.

reply to post by Druid42


I'm happy members are getting many different things out of it .

The feedback is appreciated.

reply to post by SLAYER69


What it said to me...the blush may be gone from the rose. But, the rose never died....

S&F

Des

Wonderfully written! You're a talented wordsmith.

reply to post by imawlinn


Thank you.

Side note: imawlinn

I really do appreciate your contributed poem very much.