posted on Aug, 4 2012 @ 02:50 AM
Warning: You are about to read constructive criticism
Whether it is accepted, or rejected, well, that is out of my control.
That↑↑ is a sloppy mess. If you want people to 'listen
' to what you have to say, then you should really try to keep the reader in
mind, when presenting the information. That mess is not reader-friendly, which is a turn off, and will likely cause many to run away.
Waaaaayyyy tooo many video links. If you want people to watch, you gotta make it easy for them. Pick out a few of the best, to arouse interest, and
embed them for ease. Having too many choices, creates unnecessary thoughts. People don't wanna think, so many will likely choose to watch
Also, it would probably be a good idea to find out what the word 'domestic' actually means.