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Originally posted by ParAvion
I like your use of words, but to me the poem seems to "move around" too much. This is just my opinion of course and I am no pro (I do read a lot however). I wonder if you should focus more on one theme instead of trying to bunch a whole lot of different ideas together.
Thanks for sharing!edit on 3-4-2012 by ParAvion because: (no reason given)