Something I wrote

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posted on Mar, 13 2012 @ 08:10 PM
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Wanted to see what you guys thought about this, be honest please. It is really dark but... this is the kinda stuff I enjoy writing.

Not sure what to specify this piece as but regardless, here it goes:


Wrists wet with blood to flow into the sea
I know he'll be at the shore, waiting for me
So here I will stand, with this rope in hand
I will tie it to the sky and hang my head high
My decor' upon this vessel, just for you to see
Your eyes may weep, but you do not cry for me

Her blood now stains the sand from the sea
And now, what do you think of me?
Am I a murderer, a reaper of life?
No! This is all your fault, for your unrelenting strife!

My life ended from the pain of this love I once bore
Yet you still mourn for this beggar, this whore!
I wept many a night for this love lost
To relieve myself, this is merely what it cost
So sing me a song of sorrow, and cast my body back out to fall to the ocean floor
For in death, I am renewed, I am wretched no more

I hope one day you will return to this forsaken sea
Look!-- No, gaze upon the ocean majesty and forever think of me!




posted on Mar, 14 2012 @ 12:54 PM
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well written. but i think i'm going to go kill myself now.
but really, it was nice. good imagery.
maybe i'll just go curl up in a ball on the couch now.
or hide in the bathroom corner with the lights off.
my fault, not yours.



posted on Mar, 14 2012 @ 02:02 PM
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reply to post by couldbeanyone
 


Lol!

Why is that? Is it that sad? haha



posted on Mar, 14 2012 @ 03:55 PM
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reply to post by GreenEyedVixen
 


i'm a bleeding heart what can i say.

the heart ache... oh the heart ache...



posted on Mar, 14 2012 @ 03:59 PM
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reply to post by couldbeanyone
 


As am I.
I believe that is apparent through my writing.



posted on Mar, 14 2012 @ 04:06 PM
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reply to post by GreenEyedVixen
 


yeah, i kind of got that.

but the writing itself is nice. like i said, good imagery.
i applaud that you are writing, i need to do something like that.



posted on Mar, 14 2012 @ 04:25 PM
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Thank you

It's just a small hobby of mine, I've thought about writing for a living for a few times, but then again I fear it would take the joy out of it.

Do you have any hobbies of your own?



posted on Mar, 15 2012 @ 01:05 PM
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weeelllll... to be completely honest i read... a lot. and i knit and crochet. i used to write but haven't written anything of consequence in years. except i did write a report as a favor on the great pyramids of giza for a friend's college english class. got a B.





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