reply to post by eleven44
Right on, as a musician I understand your thirst for feedback. Ima be honest though..
First off, you really need to drive the melody harder- or more emphasis on it. A lead vocalist is badly needed. It was a great, catchy melody, but
seemed to drown.
The girls sound great, but almost too choiry. Powerful, none the less.
Composer neglected resolving measures at crucial points. Although seemingly generic, resolve is just that: expected. And needed. Otherwise th3
mind's ear is left itching.
I didnt catch the ATS shoutout
this is the same vid from your earlier post, no?
I like the message, though, and it did come to life.
Im not trying to be overly critical, although I personally would want that.
I watched again just now..spoken messages are great contentwise, but its not what you say-its how you say it. Some pieces pull of spoken and sung
messages..the two kind of clash here. I would get a tenor, reshape the spoken part, and save the spoken message for the bridge. That organ lead was
awful, im sorry. You cant combine generic and personal like that on a lead-without weakening the continuity as a whole.
Thats quite a bit of negative feedback, but it's honest, as I see the foundation of a GR3AT idea here. The feeling and message are strong, and the
composer conveyed it nicely in the rhythm/build.
I have more to say, but Ive said enough. Besides, I dont feel like waking up to 8 pissed off bohemians with instruments straddling me.
Conclusion: it doesnt suck, but a lot more should have transpired between where it is now and release. My overall complaint is the spoken parts. Dont
musically inflect spoken messages, or youre halfassing singing them. The feel and message ALMOST makes up for it.
I thought she was singing 'but the money's too loud,' instead of 'mind'. Heh.
Now read my " Food for thought:nom nom nom" thread posted at the same time as, and feel free to get even. Hehehe