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Topic started on 18-10-2011 @ 10:38 PM by sonnny1

Lay your head down dear...........weep gently.

You have nothing to fear,we will burn the Presidents for warmth.

Your cold skin will warm,in the glowing fires of freedom.

Your bruises will heal,with the coming of Winters march.

These times are meaningful,these times of uncertainty.

Illusions tempered, in the skies of the free.

These changes are made,with the sweat of the broken.

Boots of the oppressed,and oppressors........are not heard here.

You have nothing to fear...........

You have nothing to fear...........

reply posted on 18-10-2011 @ 11:32 PM by TDawgRex

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Ugh...poetry.

The only thing I hate more than poetry is Shakespeare.

S&F though, I'm trying to broaden my horizens. It's hard for a Neanderthal of my talents.

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reply posted on 18-10-2011 @ 11:52 PM by sonnny1

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Thanks TDawg.......I know many that wont even read Poetry,but I had this made days ago,and didnt drop it,cause it was my second [#Occ] work.......

I wanted to incorporate it with my story,but thought against it.........

reply posted on 19-10-2011 @ 05:38 PM by argentus

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I like this offering quite a bit. It takes a few readings to fully absorb the impact -- at least for me. You craft your words well, and paint a picture, albeit not a cheery one, but then life isn't always a cheery thing, is it?

reply posted on 19-10-2011 @ 08:17 PM by Thurisaz

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I liked the second line...and I did not expect it.

I like it because you surprised me straight up...

humour mixed with some hardness... It is not sarcasm. I don't know what the word is that best describes it.

Dry humour mixed with an anger. anyone want to help me out here?

I did think of Monty Python...but I don't think you intended that?

Could imagine that one in a skit for Life of Brian

s & f

reply posted on 19-10-2011 @ 09:51 PM by sonnny1

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When I wrote it,I had in mind to actually install it to my story. I wrote both back to back.The second line reminded me of a story I once heard regarding a notorious trafficker on the run. He burned 2 million US dollars to keep his child warm.

It always struck me as ironic. Here,Its more Worthless,due to the current situation the world faces. I can see many in the near future,burning it for warmth.......

Thank You for the kind response.

reply posted on 19-10-2011 @ 09:53 PM by sonnny1

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Yes, the angst in the streets is growing. I believe that my feelings were represented in the eyes of history,and the way I see us repeating in its footsteps.

Thank you for taking the time to read it........

reply posted on 22-10-2011 @ 11:00 AM by v1rtu0s0

Great poem bro. You manage to say alot with your short poem! S+F!

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