Stars and Lines: Seasonally-Affected Poetry Contest **Winners announced**, page 2


Pages: <<  1    2    3    4    5  >>
ATS Members have flagged this thread 20 times


reply posted on 12-11-2010 @ 05:25 PM by B.Morrison
reply to post by masqua


(Untitled.)

Wake up its cold the alarm is screaming,
Hit snooze roll over & get back to dreaming,
Look back the wars cold the alarm bells are ringing,
Totalitarian corporate sponsored bluebirds are singing,

It’s time to what? Who really knows?
The problems are vast - keep us all on our toes,
More than a joke to keep up as we choke,
More confusion than hope when the stock market froze,

So we fall for the lies in the frost paralyzed,
A cold stare in our eyes our warm hearts are disguised,
And that person in time fragments deep and divides,
Into labels & versions, by others defined.

Don’t hate the raven for the truth of his crime,
The message is harsh but he opens your mind,
Disappears till you’re old & returns in the winter,
To sing a song of moving beyond…
This 3D limited splinter.

-B.M

edit on 12/11/10 by B.Morrison because: (no reason given)



reply posted on 13-11-2010 @ 05:17 PM by AutOmatIc
What amazing entries so far! Can't wait to read the rest of them, thanks for this thread! Here's my entry:

Top of the Sky

At the top of the sky
A tremor comes and goes
More phantoms on the
Lofty beaches of space
Black night solitude
You cheer the hearts of rage
Bleached in the center on whose paths
Nothing is real except
This lover in a dream

In a crystal icebox all the world sleeps
To sleep's treacherous treason
Dreamer in an avalanche
Of most ancient despair
In the absence of her universe

A woman's body made up of stars
In the desert a triple mystery
Veiled in a dark fog and the buzz
Of worlds and seas pulsing
About heartbeats and a weeping sun
In your bosom archaic ecstasy
I lay an offering
In the antechambers of being
Reach for quivering fulcrum of all life
Which according to the stasis of matter
Become the blind secret changes
In the regional essence of desire

To the statuesque creation
In her robe of changing planets
To the blood-clock ticking
Plunging in depths of immeasurable bleakness

I admit I was trying to break in
It's only that I was never willing to be pulled
Away from this cellar
That I passed out in
Our date at the insomnia motel
At the top of the sky

There shot three golden dots
In a swift white line
On whose palace
Ubiquitous

A moment of silence shrieking lightning
Forever now
Dancing in a cold sweat
A burst heart empty of blood
Caught in frozen vacuum
At the stony edge of void
Sealed for eternity
At the top of the sky.


reply posted on 17-11-2010 @ 03:17 PM by Myendica
reply to post by blamethegreys



That bump was shameless
when you lose
you should blame this
now get loose



<~~ starts bobbin head!
edit on 17-11-2010 by Myendica because: (no reason given)



reply posted on 17-11-2010 @ 03:17 PM by Myendica
reply to post by blamethegreys



I got double posted...

<~~ still bobbin head!
edit on 17-11-2010 by Myendica because: (no reason given)



reply posted on 21-11-2010 @ 07:19 PM by Tribble
reply to post by masqua



Thank you for the cool contest- Smiles
I hope you get a lot more entry's.

I just came in first place on another site for "the worst poem you have ever written" lol


reply posted on 21-11-2010 @ 08:39 PM by littlebunny
Alone For The Holidays

Alone for the holidays,
Out here on the road on my own,
Wishing I was home with my family,
Spending this time with the ones that I love.

I call my family on the telephone,
My wife asks me if I'm keeping warm,
I tell her I have you guys on my mind,
and it helps to keep me pushing on.

she puts my little girl on the telephone,
she's crying boo-hooing I go oh no.
through her tears she finally gets it out,
she cries daddy please come home.

Alone for the holidays,
Out here on the road on my own.
Wishing I was home with my family,
Spending this time with the ones that I love.

I tell my wife I got to go,
there's still to many miles left to roll.
I tell her I love her,
and to kiss our kids on the head,
and be sure to tuck our babies in real tight.

Alone for the holidays,
Out here on the road on my own.
Wishing I was home with my family,
Spending this time with the ones that I love.

But I got to keep rolling,
cause you know them bills keep on piling.
sacrifices there are to many,
but this time of year really gets to me.
I swear on my very soul,
this time next year I will be home.

Alone for the holidays,
Out here on the road on my own.
Wishing I was home with my family,
Spending this time with the ones that I love.

Charles Marcello; created Dec 24th, 2000.

I wrote this as a country song while I was away from home. I think it flows nicely as a poem as well. Hope you like it even though its not a happy ending poem/song.
edit on 21-11-2010 by littlebunny because: to add a missing word



reply posted on 24-11-2010 @ 01:00 PM by jeanvaljean
The Stygian Promise

On Valentine's Day, the reeds let him go.

He had his best suit on and his shiny new shoes
And his blood freshly flowed
His face was suffused with it, the warmth of his Love

Clutched to his chest, a heart-shaped tin
With a big chocolate heart inside
For his Valentine

Crispy February day, crispy gravel underfoot
Afternoon birds, gossiping
A writer plane, over head, scribbling silly nothings

Ahead of him, a forest, then the lake, then her house
The thought of her, his pace quickened
He would please her this time

The forest, trees sleeping standing up, mourning their dead
A rock, suitable for a rest; carefully smoothing trouser folds
He sat, in Divine Peace, watching the clouding of his breath

Now the lake, his favourite place, deathly quiet
Over by the high ridge, past memories of boyish dives
And there, just out of reach, wild camellias in pinks and whites

Lean in, just a little closer, stretch your hand, a little bit further

The path to his lover's house, branching off the road, he can barely see it
Through the savage sleet clawing at his eyes, and the tenebrous skies
But he fights the gleeful wind, intent on keeping his promise

In the driveway, a car he's never seen and she doesn't drive
A lit window, snatches of songs echo dimly
Getting closer, he sees it all. Peals of laughter, piano duo. Another man

The heart-shaped tin clatters to his feet
And the carefully picked Rose of Winter, pink and white
Wilts in his trembling hand, turns to fragrant ashes

He stands there, in his shredded suit and gaping shoes
His bloated belly disgorges the rot of a whole year
The pain on his face is etched in pendent flesh

One gasping breath is enough to seize his heart, hardened to ice
Then one abysmal moan, like the skilled tap of a pick on a fault
And it shatters into fourteen parts

He kneels on the frozen ground, in the wind and the rain
Picks up the pieces of his heart, one at a time
And puts them back in the box

Two little boys run home from the lake without once looking back
They say there is a dead man with weeds for hair and glow-worms for eyes
Banging his head against the ice as if trying to get out




edit on 27/11/10 by masqua because: Edit by request



reply posted on 26-11-2010 @ 08:40 PM by B.Morrison
Originally posted by B.Morrison
Disappears till you’re old & returns in the winter,
To sing a song of moving beyond…
This 3D limited splinter.


I've been looking at this flawed poem on my computer on and off ever since I wrote it and finally having realised what i didn't like and rather than scrapping it entirely I've revised the last verse. I don't know if it's fair or not for me to be able to resubmit the corrected poem in the comp so consider this post just something I wanted to do to fix the poem and not part of the competition - I think the new version ends on a more positive note. The poem also has a name now -

Splinters.

Wake up its cold the alarm is screaming,
Hit snooze roll over & get back to dreaming,
Look back the wars cold the alarm bells are ringing,
Totalitarian corporate sponsored bluebirds are singing,

It's time to what? Who really knows?
The problems are vast - keep us all on our toes,
More than a joke to keep up as we choke,
More confusion than hope when the stock market froze,

So we fall for the lies in the frost paralysed,
A cold stare in our eyes our warm hearts are disguised,
And that person in time fragments deep and divides,
Into labels & versions, by others defined.

Don't hate the raven for the truth of his crime,
The message is harsh but he opens your mind,
there is always warmth beyond the winter,
always more then this limited splinter.

-B.M
edit on 26/11/10 by B.Morrison because: (no reason given)



reply posted on 26-11-2010 @ 09:30 PM by masqua
reply to post by B.Morrison



Its fair. Everyone can post poems as often as you like, so revising the wording of a previously posted poem is no problem with me.




On the contest itself, I understand why the numbers of entrants are slim... American Thanksgiving, the TSA melee, North Korea and a host of other distractions are the likely cause.

How would everyone feel if I extended the deadling a couple of weeks?

Yay or nay answers will not be slapped with 1-line warnings (at least by me )
Pages: <<  1    2    3    4    5  >>    ^^TOP^^



The Earth Rumbles [2014WC]
  Posted 1 days ago with 14 member flags
September, 2014... Prognosis. A Writing Contest [2014WC]
  Posted 10 days ago with 13 member flags
The Walker [2014WC]
  Posted 10 days ago with 12 member flags
To Reset The Clock [2014WC]
  Posted 9 days ago with 9 member flags
The Game [2014WC]
  Posted 8 days ago with 8 member flags
The Warning [2014WC]
  Posted 10 days ago with 8 member flags
Relief [2014WC]
  Posted 9 days ago with 8 member flags
Looking Back [2014WC]
  Posted 10 days ago with 7 member flags