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(poem) vision of death

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posted on Aug, 16 2010 @ 04:46 PM
I died
together with the world,

when leaves where falling,
and the wind blew transparent tears.
The north was moving.

When snow fell down,
and the flakes sowed pathways of death.
The east falling apart.

When flowers bloomed,
with empty soulless seeds.
The south frozen.

When the sun rose,
with colorless beams of sorrow.
The west forever dark.

We died
together with the world.

posted on Aug, 16 2010 @ 09:26 PM
reply to post by GypsK

Great Poetry! I love to read and write poetry.

I love how i can just lose myself in a blank page...

i think i have so many unfinished notebooks because of this. I like to have 'fresh', clean pages...for some reason it helps me think better?

Do you write a lot?

posted on Aug, 17 2010 @ 02:27 AM

Unlike you, I don't like blanc pages a lot, lol, that's why I have so many notebooks with lot's of meaningless words on every page

I finish about 4-6 poems a year and been writing sinds 2000, some of my english poems are on ATS, the others are in dutch, my own language.... most else that I write remains unfinished

Sometimes I can only come up with one good sentence and then I work it into my digital artwork (not sure how one would call that)

Why don't you post one of yours?

posted on Aug, 17 2010 @ 07:11 AM
Loved it Gyps.

posted on Aug, 18 2010 @ 01:07 PM
reply to post by AccessDenied


I know it might be a bit to depressing for some,
but that's the way I write *g*

posted on Aug, 20 2010 @ 08:56 PM
reply to post by GypsK

I don't know if I'm quite ready for the world to critique

however, just be on the look out, I may decide to do it one day....

posted on Aug, 20 2010 @ 09:10 PM
reply to post by GypsK

this would be a great doors song, but it would have to be song by Jim morrison,,, and that aint gonna happen.

Very good... keep it up

posted on Aug, 25 2010 @ 10:46 PM
Very heavy, yet amazingly light. I felt the connection. Great work!

posted on Aug, 26 2010 @ 05:16 AM
reply to post by GypsK

As I watched you die together with me,
to the fire balled malestrom, of heat and dust,
bursting through the air blasting us to pieces,
my last consciousness, was you vaporised.

And yet, you and I lived again,
with a new consciousness, as beings of light,
and matter, floating drifting in space,
away from a breaking up planet Earth,

I seek your hand, but being of matter,
only to surge past each other,
with only fleetings of sadness,
as emotions are gradually erased.

Feeling nothing completely,
Seeking nothing ultimately,
Comprehending lastly,
we are one, with the universe, finally....

posted on Aug, 26 2010 @ 04:27 PM
reply to post by SeekerofTruth101

Now we know it all,
the answers we looked for, so greedy,
the questions we pondered, so dearly.

Now we smile with understanding,
a body of matter, so meaningless,
an experience so grandly.

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