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Shade of Red (Poem)

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posted on Jul, 22 2010 @ 01:49 PM
When you read this, think about:

- What is the significance of the color red?
- What thoughts were running through the protagonist's head during each individual stanza?
- What was the insatiable appetite depicted in the first and last stanza?
- How was the protagonist released from said insatiable appetite?
- What drove the protagonist to search for said release?

Also, I would like judgment on the following:

- Imagery
- Rhythm/Meter
- Impact

Constructive criticism is welcomed.


Shade of Red

Damn this insatiable appetite,
This unyielding lust for something more.
So trapped am I, under my skin;
A wretched home, a place to abhor.

Averting eyes see none but red,
Like a raging bull I am unsighted.
I try to see, but to no avail,
Red remains, my mind blighted.

I reach out to touch it only to stop,
My eyes fill up with horror, mouth agape;
My fingers trembling, my heart racing,
My hands blanketed in crimson tape.

I look to the left and now the right,
An object lies dormant in my grip.
A horrid chill rushes up my spine
As I glare bewildered at the sharpened tip.

With a clank the blade hits the pavement,
With a thud my knees follow suit.
With my hands outreached I glare once more,
As the crimson tears swiftly chute.

My gaze averts once more below,
The knife which took a life lifelessly lies.
With a whim I reanimate the bloodied blade,
Into the void of which my heart once guised.

Without a sound my pulse quickly slows,
My blank eyes return from sudden dilation.
This wretched place which I abhor, so red,
No longer trapped, sweet liberation.

And so the insatiable lust is silenced
With a pool of crimson ever-growing.
I am no longer blinded by the red,
For now, forever, with life forgoing.

posted on Jul, 22 2010 @ 02:09 PM
Too vivid for me...
Best focus on blue for awhile.

posted on Jul, 22 2010 @ 02:11 PM
It was for an upcoming contest where the theme was anything to do with red.

Sure, I could have taken the rose route, but that's not my style

posted on Jul, 22 2010 @ 08:42 PM

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