posted on Dec, 19 2009 @ 07:43 AM
Great read....and liked his followup story about the life after death question.
God, I pray that this becomes the new religion...a religion of self responsibility over diety worship...perfect.
Cool idea, Saturn. But may I suggest that you follow the author's example, and make your own story, rather than adopt his story?
There's an awful lot of the author's frontal lobes here. His God panders to his waking ego, prejudices, and opinions. His God, by an amazing
coincidence, talks just like him.
Maybe yours would, too, but at least it would be you, not somebody else's ego, prejudices, and opinions.
There are also too many recycled memories of the science fiction the author loves so much. For example, the notion of thresholds of technological
achievement for a species to become "interesting" - even interesting in the specific sense of being ripe for a visit - is a sci-fi staple. Flying
machines in this story, nuclear weapons here and in The Day the Earth Stood Still
, warp drive in Star Trek
's prime directive, ...
The story's best wordpicture (IMO, obviously) is that of the species, any member of which can destroy the whole species at any time. Which, of
course, is the back story of Forbidden Planet
There's nothing wrong with borrowing, especially borrowing with reworking. It was great to be reminded of Forbidden Planet
, and its roots.
I don't know how to write this post without sounding "critical" of the author. I admire him for performing this exercise. I think his results he
achieved are good for him. I just think there is a lot of room for other people to do better, for them.
[edit on 19-12-2009 by eight bits]