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Come Inside The Shows About To Start Its Guaranteed To Blow Your Head Apart!
“Seriously dude, are you going with her or what?” Greg asked with a smile as they watched the new girl walk from the bathroom back toward the
production floor. She turned before she continued through the double doors and smiled at Brian, who admittedly was watching her butt. Greg was
watching too but he quickly turned and busied himself with cleaning his wrenches as his face began to turn red. Brian blushed and smiled as he
offered a quick wave of his hand. She turned and continued to her work station as the double doors closed behind her.
“What’s wrong with you man? She caught us.” Brian said as he punched his work mate’s shoulder. They both laughed and now Brian joined Greg
in cleaning the tools they had just used.
“Well, are you gonna answer me or just keep acting like nothin’s goin on between you two?” Greg persisted. He knew something was up between
them. He knew because Brian always spent more time by her machine with the preventative maintenance schedule they kept. He would leisurely go about
changing supposedly worn belts and lubricating parts that just didn’t need lubricating. All the while they would be giggling and chatting. He was
envious because that new chick was hot and she only seemed interested in Brian. She wouldn’t even talk to the other guys in the maintenance shop.
Not only that, but Brian stopped showing up at the bar on Tuesday nights where they would ritually meet and play pool. He knew that Brian had to be
seeing her.
“Look dude, I’m seeing her alright? That’s all I’m gonna say. About two months ago the both of us have been hanging out. We went to the
movies a couple nights and we just hung out at my place a couple nights. A couple of nights we hung out at her place. No big deal. She’s pretty
cool.” Brian offered this as his answer as he tried to dismiss the persistent questioning.
Deep down, Brian was jumping for joy. That chick was hot and he knew it. All the other guys must be jealous of him and he had to play it cool. He
never thought in his wildest dreams that he would end up with such an awesome chick. They had a lot in common and she seemed to know just what he
wanted to do before he even asked, in every aspect of a guy and girl relationship. She was the perfect specimen as the guys would often joke about
when they saw a good looking girl. Brian was in love with her but he couldn’t let on.
She had started working at the plant about three months back. Everyone noticed her right away and made comments. Everyone tried to hook up with her,
even the floor supervisors, but she would have no part of them. She kept to herself and did her job as all the guys would gawk at her. It wasn’t
until her respooling machine came up on the computer for scheduled maintenance that Brian was brave enough to talk to her. They hit it off right
away. She was intriguing to him in every area.
She had moved to Brian’s town from Sacramento because her job there had closed down. She then made the move to this area because it was cheaper and
she wanted to start over. She had never been married and had no kids, and better yet, she didn’t have a boyfriend. Brian’s luck was
unbelievable. From that point on, they spent all of their free time with each other. Their relationship was blossoming but here at work they had to
keep it professional.
“You lucky dog! I mean really, what in the world does she see in you? Look at me; I’m taller and much more handsome.” Greg said as he
straightened up and then started to laugh. Well, Brian deserved a break like that anyway. At least she was with a guy from the maintenance shop and
not with one of the bosses. That would really tick him off. Good for Brian. Greg just wished he would share some details of their time alone
together. Greg wanted to hear something juicy.
“Hey, she has good taste, what can I say?” Brian dropped the wrench he was polishing back into the drawer that it belonged in. “Besides, who
else could keep up with that motor of hers?” Brian teased Greg. He knew what he really wanted hear but he wasn’t about to divulge anything.
Just then, the end of the shift alarm sounded and everyone started toward the time clock. “Looks, like we’re done here dude. I’ll bring this
back to the shop, go ahead and wash up.” Brian offered as he began to roll the tool box back toward the maintenance area. Greg smiled and headed
toward the bathroom. “Lucky stiff! You lucky stiff.” Greg said as he was walking and rolling up his sleeves. He stopped suddenly and
turned.
“Dude, are you gonna make it on Saturday? Remember, my place, big party?” Greg stood waiting for a response from Brian who had stopped and
turned as he seemed to be thinking.
“No, man I’m sorry, I forgot all about that. I’m going to see that Afghan Preacher guy at the stadium that night. Jen already bought tickets
and is really into that guy. She begged me to go and I told her I would. I can’t tell her I’d rather go to your party; she already paid for the
tickets. Man I’m really sorry.” Brian was genuinely sorry that he forgot, but there was no way he was going disrupt his and Jen’s plans that
night for a goofy beer party.
“Yeah, yeah I understand. The times they are a changing! Go enjoy listening to how the whole world is one crap. I’ll be thinkin about you as
I’m havin my eighteenth beer. Knucklehead!” Greg turned and continued on toward the bathroom. He couldn’t blame Brian, that chick was hot and
he would do the same thing. He wondered if Brian would mind collecting some of her bath water so he could drink it. He laughed at this idea and
wondered how Brian would react if he asked him.
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reply posted on 10-9-2009 @ 10:03 PM by jackflap
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Revelation 13:1 And I stood upon the sand of the sea, and saw a beast rise up out of the sea, having seven heads and ten horns, and upon his
horns ten crowns, and upon his heads the name of blasphemy.
Brian wasn’t really sure what the Afghan Preacher guy was all about. He knew from the news that the guy was very popular all around the world. He
was supposedly responsible for ending the wars in Afghanistan and Iraq. He knew that the guy wrote a book called JaWriting. It was so popular and
accepted that it became a mandatory curriculum in schools all around the world. The guy was trying to convince everyone that the whole world should
unite under a one world chair or something along these lines. It had something to do with the seven continents and a one world government. He was
going to listen to him speak because Jen was into this type of stuff. Why not, maybe he’d learn something. At least he’d be with her and find
out more about what interested her. He couldn’t wait to meet up with her.
The Afghan preacher rose to prominence through the Iraq and Afghanistan wars. He was the voice of reason above all of the violence that had killed so
many. He single handedly reigned in the terrorist mentality of the Jihadists and brought peace to the lands that no military force could. The
occupying forces saw no need in continuing their presence and the Afghan Preacher’s words were able to unite cultures like no other person in
history. His popularity had spread worldwide and people now flocked to his assemblies. His influence was so great that world leaders began taking
notice.
His logic was that we are all human and that we needed one another to survive. The simplicity of his message was like a much needed feast to a
starving world that had no answers. People realized that his was a message of peace and restoration. The Afghan Preacher was slowly changing the
world and he was on his way to the United States. Brian and Jen would be there to hear him speak.
Brian laughed at himself. He would never be going to something like this if it wasn’t for Jen. Hell, there were a lot of things he wouldn’t be
doing if it wasn’t for her. He laughed about that too. Some of the nights they spent together were strange though. He remembered bizarre dreams
sometimes when they had spent the night together. A lot of strange dreams seemed to occur when they crashed with each other. Brian dismissed these
as nothing really, he was used to being alone and having someone to spend the night with probably brought these things on. He was sure they would
pass.
It was time for the assembly and it was a sold out show. Jen had bought the tickets early enough to get pretty good seats. She didn’t believe many
people would be sitting anyway. Her enthusiasm was contagious and even Brian couldn’t wait for the Afghan Preacher now.
They were sitting in the stadium listening to a distant drum roll that reverberated around the massive complex. Laser lights shone from high above
and scattered across the platform where the Preacher would address the huge crowds. Smoke machines provided a blanket of fog over the stage that
poured from its edge and rolled into the crowd. The anticipation was palpable and everyone couldn’t wait to see the Afghan Preacher. Brian could
feel his heartbeat in his ears and he tingled with excitement. He tried not to seem so giddy, but he knew darn well that everyone else was feeling
the same thing. This was pretty cool.
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reply posted on 10-9-2009 @ 10:10 PM by jackflap
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Revelation 17:3 So he carried me away in the spirit into the wilderness: and I saw a woman sit upon a scarlet coloured beast, full of names of
blasphemy, having seven heads and ten horns.
Suddenly the stadium went dark and all noise from the sound systems had ceased. In that instant it felt as if the place grew colder. Then, with a
flash and a thunderous boom, the stage was illuminated with bright fluorescent light and the Afghan Preacher stood in front of a microphone with his
arms raised. The crowds all cheered in unison and everyone started to stand and applaud.
Brian couldn’t believe all the excitement and he suddenly felt grateful for Jen’s idea of going to see this guy. He stood up and began to clap as
well with a smile that he simply could not stop. This must be something because Brian hadn’t expected this kind of energy from a Preacher. He
couldn’t wait to hear what this guy was going to say. The cheers slowly subsided as the Afghan Preacher used his arms in a downward waving motion
to silence the applause. It was now quiet enough to begin.
“Thank you kind people. Thank you. I must, before I begin, tell you something very serious. It is about my message.” The words echoed across
the stadium and just his opening statement had everyone captivated. He continued.
“This message comes from you. Not from me. It is your message that I convey. You have bought me this message in your collective will and I am
only here to send it back to you and affirm what all of your hearts have already figured out. So please, turn to one another and thank each other for
this message of love and peace that is emerging from the darkness that has blinded us for so long. It is your message and I believe you all know that
already.” He gestured toward the crowd.
Everyone turned and shook hands. Some hugged and even more were crying. Brian turned and extended a hand toward a burly looking man who had tears in
his eyes. The guy pulled Brian to himself and hugged him as he sobbed softly and called him friend. Brian couldn’t help but be swept up in the
emotion of the event and he returned the hug and even called the guy friend back. There really was something about this Afghan Preacher, huh? The
salutations were now ending and everyone directed their attention back toward the stage.
“I have seen the worst of what isolating our brothers around the world can do. I have seen what turning a blind eye to someone’s concerns and
fears have done to this world for too long. We are all human and we need each other. It is as plain as the nose on our faces. We cannot be whole by
ignoring the needs of our friends in other lands. It is this indifference to our fellow man that has eaten us alive! I am working with your world
leaders to unite all of mankind. Imagine all seven continents under one common law and guardianship. We can be aware of our distant neighbor’s
problems and work together to bring them comfort as one unified force. The wages of continuing on as before are terrorism and hatred. We cannot
allow religious ideology or unfounded fears to stop us in our progress. We must tell our leaders to unite under a one world chair. A world chair
that oversees the needs of the many and acts to fulfill those needs collectively. To bring comfort and healing to those who require it.” Everyone
in the crowd stood again and began clapping and cheering.
They understood what the Afghan Preacher was saying. They understood and wanted him to bring the change. Brian was entranced at this point, and Jen
began poking him in the ribs. He snapped out of it and turned to her.
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reply posted on 10-9-2009 @ 10:18 PM by jackflap
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Revelation 17:7 And the angel said unto me, Wherefore didst thou marvel? I will tell thee the mystery of the woman, and of the beast that
carrieth her, which hath the seven heads and ten horns.
“Brian, here, you forgot your notebook. Take it.” She handed Brian a small red spiral notebook. He took it slowly trying to remember what it
was about. He looked at quizzically then turned the front cover over. That’s right, he did forget it. It was a good thing she had remembered it.
Brian began making his way toward the stage. Jen gathered her things and made her way to the exit.
High above the crowds, in one of the private luxury box seats, sat a solitary man. His face was expressionless and he sat straight, viewing the event
as if studying a set of mathematical equations. In his ear was a Bluetooth device and he waited for his status reports. The device crackled then
softly beeped as it picked up the transmission.
“Psychotronics are fully engaged and absorption is high. Transmission of this event is booming worldwide. You are witnessing the culmination of
extensive testing and research. Jim Jones, Manson, Heaven’s Gate, Koresh and all the others are right here gentlemen. Jester is pleased. Stand by
for the solution.” The earpiece beeped softly.
“I know the fear of change. I know that it does not come easy. I know that this continent has struggled with past injustices done in the name of
peace. It has decimated your lands. Your economy is ruin, but I tell you that I have seen the cure and it is at your fingertips. Your technology
centers have devised a system whereby mankind will never see poverty again. I have seen its potential and it is the way we will unite all of mankind.
It was not some God from high above that devised this cure. It was you.” The Afghan Preacher pointed to the crowds and they cheered in response.
Brian methodically twisted and turned through the crowds, forcing himself through the cheering bodies toward the front of the stage.
“Do you want to have eternal life? I tell you now that this will happen! This does not come from some book that promises and does not deliver.
This is for real and you have made it happen! Do you want your needs met before they become dire emergencies? I tell you now that this will happen!
Do you want to be free of debt and free to pursue that which is important in life? I tell you now that this will happen! These are not fairy tales
but facts and it has come from you!” The crowd could stand it no more and began to roar in acceptance of the Afghan Preacher’s plans.
The Afghan Preacher was in mid sentence when he noticed the distraught man that had made his way to the front. The man’s arm was extended and a
pistol was aimed directly at him. He instinctively raised his right hand so as to make him halt but the shot had already rung out. The bullet passed
through his right hand and into his forehead. The Afghan Preacher fell backward and Brian was tackled by security.
From the safety of the luxury box seat the lone man watched coldly. His earpiece beeped softly. He turned and watched the crowds scattering from
their seats and running for the exits as he listened to his message.
“Well done gentlemen. Phase two is engaged. Anomaly is a go. Jester is very pleased.” The earpiece beeped softly. The man would wait for the
crowds to disperse. He sat back and smiled.
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reply posted on 10-9-2009 @ 10:27 PM by jackflap
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Revelation 13:16 And he causeth all, both small and great, rich and poor, free and bond, to receive a mark in their right hand, or in their
foreheads:
Brian’s image was plastered all over the news. The people demanded an investigation as to how this was allowed to happen. It was reported that the
weapon had been staged in the stadium by a cohort of Brian’s who worked for the janitorial crews. This guy was reported to be a Muslim fanatic.
Nobody ever really knew him. He was just an image on the news.
On Brian’s person, it was reported, that a notebook filled with deciphered words was found. A code was found in the note book as well. In the code
numbers were assigned to letters by sixes. A being six and B being twelve and C being eighteen and so on. Afghan Preacher was calculated to be six
hundred and sixty six. As was Jawriting and World Chair. A lot of other words were calculated and no one could make sense of what this terrorist had
done and why.
In Brian’s house they recovered his computer and found that he had been thoroughly into end time prophecy websites. They found numerous weapons and
Bibles. It was reported that he was simply a Christian terrorist. The two of them were exactly what the Afghan Preacher was trying to rid the world
of.
As for Jen, there was no mention of her. There was no paper trail of her at the plant. Human resources would have no evidence of her employment or
existence. The workers there figured that the event was so traumatic that she just left. There was no mention of her going to the assembly with
Brian. She had work to do elsewhere and she was a busy woman.
The Afghan Preacher almost died. He had been taken to the hospital where the latest technological advances were applied. He lived on from a wheel
chair and spoke on a very limited basis through a computer which was linked to his brain. He had someone else to speak for him now and he would
appear with his speaker at assemblies to give the masses hope. His message of salvation lived on. A year after his near death experience he arrived
with his speaker at the same stadium. It was another sold out show.
“The Afghan Preacher has survived this attack because of your hope for a better world! His message was for peace and for this he was attacked by
extremists. If we are to see his message of unity come true we must rid ourselves of those who do not want peace, but how do we know who is really
ours? Look at your Afghan Preacher and see his wounds. I submit to you that we will never forget this attack and the evil that brought it to us. I
am going to mark myself! In the same way the Afghan preacher has been wounded to show my allegiance to his dream. I want the world to know that I am
not an extremist and that I am part of this world!” The speaker was more eloquent than even the Afghan Preacher was in his prime. The crowds
cheered in agreement with him.
The speaker went on to explain how the technological advances of the peoples continent have made it possible for them to root out those who do not
belong. He raised his hands to the skies as a laser was fired from a satellite and burned a life size portrait of Brian to ashes before the awestruck
crowds. The event was seen worldwide through the media and absorption was high. The people, soon after this, would begin marking themselves in their
right hand or forehead through surgery or tattoos. Some would get scarring procedures done to replicate the wounds. Some would get tattoos with the
new insignia of the world government that the Afghan Preacher helped bring about. Whatever was more fashionable at the time and God help those who
didn’t want to mark themselves.
The luxury box seat was occupied by the same individual that was occupying it last year. He waited for his status reports. His earpiece beeped
softly.
“Anomaly has the reign’s boys. He’s driving them home. Wait for it. Jester is very pleased.”
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reply posted on 10-9-2009 @ 10:31 PM by jackflap
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Link to external source used in opening post:
Karn evil 9 - Emerson Lake and Palmer - www.metrolyrics.com...
Well that was one story I had been working on for a while and never really got back to. I decided to post it and use it in the contest. I wanted to
come up with a really factual mark for the end, but that will have to suffice.
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reply posted on 11-9-2009 @ 10:52 AM by jackflap
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I just had to add some after reading music to this. Please enjoy.
It's guaranteed to blow your head apart.
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reply posted on 11-9-2009 @ 11:11 AM by AccessDenied
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Jack, your writing is bar none.
Superb.
In this story, I sense something much deeper than your words convey.
I cannot put my finger on it though.
A perfect twist.
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reply posted on 11-9-2009 @ 11:52 AM by jackflap
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Where do I begin? I could explain everything in the story but it would take a little while to do. It would be a long post. The reason you feel
there is something that you cannot put your finger on is because there is something else to it. Let me think about it and I promise I'll reveal it
soon. It cannot be explained easily I'm afraid.
Edited to add an attempt at an explanation.
Brian, if you could not tell, was the victim of mind control. Hypnosis actually. He had been programmed by Jen. Notice how she set him in motion
with the notebook. This is a known technique. It could have been anything, but it was better that he had the "evidence" on him. He wasn't into
end time prophecy at all. That was all staged at his house. He was no Christian fanatic. He was a victim.
Jen was an agent. A very good one. Her job was to program a subject to be an assassin. Brian fit the bill. He wasn't up on current events and
could care less about them. Remember, he would never have gone to the event if it were not for Jen.
The Afghan Preacher was a victim too. He was a working product. He was able to influence large crowds and was programmed to convey a specific
message. He was the product of years of testing and research as noted in the story and he was a great product. This product would have continued and
continued until he breathed his last. Thus the need for the solution.
The anomaly was just that. He knew the plan before the planners and had it worked out already. No need for psychotronics when he was let loose. The
Afghan Preacher had to be seen attacked by those who were not susceptible to the mind games. They had to be identified and vilified, the crowds had
to be traumatized as they were. The Preacher was loved and he was attacked by those who could not be influenced. Then, the Anomaly could be let
loose.
The seven headed beast mentioned in Revelations is actually the seven continents. The sea that it came out of was peoples nations and tongues. The
woman who rode the beast is those very same peoples nations and tongues. Notice how the Preacher let the people know that the great advances in
technology and even his message was their own.
Revelation 13:11-14 And I beheld another beast coming up out of the earth; and he had two horns like a lamb, and he spake as a dragon. 12 And he
exerciseth all the power of the first beast before him, and causeth the earth and them which dwell therein to worship the first beast, whose deadly
wound was healed. 13 And he doeth great wonders, so that he maketh fire come down from heaven on the earth in the sight of men, 14 and
deceiveth them that dwell on the earth by the means of those miracles which he had power to do in the sight of the beast; saying to them that dwell on
the earth, that they should make an image to the beast, which had the wound by a sword, and did live.
The Anomoly is the beast with two horns from the above passages. He is causing the world to worship the first beast, the Preacher, who was wounded.
The Preacher represents the seven continental global government. I hope this makes sense to you. Notice how in the passages he makes fire come down
from heaven. In the story he does the same thing.
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reply posted on 12-9-2009 @ 06:34 AM by AccessDenied
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Jack..thanks for the explanation.
Not what I meant though..
the deeper meaning is the reason you wrote it..the personal meaning.
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reply posted on 12-9-2009 @ 08:59 AM by jackflap
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Now I feel like a tool. The personal meaning behind writing it is easy. It is meant to entertain and make aware. That way if this stuff really does
start to go down, maybe those who read this will make the correlation.
Not that I think it will go down specifically like the story, but the elements are there. We'll be a leg up on the events. If nothing like that
ever happens, then damn I was entertained writing it, and I hope those who read it were entertained.
It's all in the title. You Gotta See The Show.
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reply posted on 12-9-2009 @ 12:12 PM by Magantice
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reply to post by jackflap
What a great story Jackflap !! You are a much deeper person than I had realized.
I'm not even going to bother trying in this story contest. Its apparent to me I should just keep on crocheting . You are a very talented writer Sir.
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reply posted on 12-9-2009 @ 02:07 PM by jackflap
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Thank you for you kind words Magantice! I am displeased that this story has taken the wind out of your sails though. If anything, it should have
inspired you to try to come up with a really great story.
You have the talent and now you have the motivation. Try to come up with a twist in a story line that will blow us out of the water. I am looking
forward to reading more of your stuff. I enjoyed your last entry, and I really want you to submit something for this contest.
My cards are on the table, develop a better hand.
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reply posted on 12-9-2009 @ 05:16 PM by Flatwoods
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You've earned a star and flag from me for your efforts, jackflap. The contest asks for a twist, and a twist is what we got when Brian shoots the
Afghan Preacher. Quite unexpected and diabolical. I can tell you spent some time writing this, with the end result being a substantial story - one
that hungry readers such as myself can really sink our teeth into. Thanks.
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reply posted on 12-9-2009 @ 07:44 PM by jackflap
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Thanks Flatwoods! I thought about ending it there but couldn't. I had to explain matters. The interesting part is this was worked on for a while.
The ending was added and took me a little bit. That whole thing with the code being found in his notebook I had figured out a while ago though.
A=6, B=12, C=18 and so on. That is some kind of weird code that people know about. If you assign the numbers to the letters throughout the whole
alphabet, you then spell something. You than add up the numbers that correspond to what you are spelling.
Computer=666 and some other odd ones. Well, afghan preacher does equal 666, as does world chair and jawriting. It was just something I threw in
there as a way to keep the context going. I thought it would be a cool "artifact" for Brian to be found with after his attempted assassination of
the Afghan Preacher.
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reply posted on 12-9-2009 @ 11:06 PM by ladyinwaiting
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Wow. Just wow. You have wowed me. Bravo.
Plus: I got it, I got it!. Even the notebook as the signal! .....And she went to the exit, aware he was going to the stage.
So................wow.
Fantastic, Jackieflap! This is another excellent contribution.
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reply posted on 13-9-2009 @ 03:59 AM by Mr. Toodles
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Excellent story dude. You know you coulda just UtwoU'd me, I have tons of ideas on the mark of the beast. I starred and flagged yesteday!
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reply posted on 13-9-2009 @ 02:22 PM by jackflap
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Thanks ladyinwaiting! I always wait for you to reply my stories eagerly. I don't know why, but I feel like your opinion matters on them. I am glad
that you were wowed. I had to use a subtle approach to the fact that he was groomed to be an assassin by her and I wasn't sure that the message came
through. You have relieved my anxiety. Thanks for replying ladyinwaiting!
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reply posted on 13-9-2009 @ 07:29 PM by ladyinwaiting
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Thank you my friend. I'm honored you feel that way. It's always a pleasure to read your stories.
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reply posted on 13-9-2009 @ 09:24 PM by jackflap
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Thanks for the reply Toodles! I did end up U2U'ing some ideas anyway. I believe we hashed out our ideas pretty good. I'm glad you enjoyed the
story!
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