~ A Mans Wish~
The crossfire of fate he sees in her eyes
Summons a beauty no man can describe
Distant & shadowed she feels she remains
Banished her dreams, she has not attained
Forged by a God of all that is pure
Unscathed by all stains, oh how she endures
A desolate yesterday clings to my soul
Raging with tension to fill this black hole
Out of all sight and out of all sound
These feelings within me are buried and bound
Ascending ablaze an emblem of light
Gives hope to today and smothers the night
Embrace no more tears my beautiful swan
This nightmare has ended, for I bring you dawn
Lost on the outskirts of life do I view
I'd give all my soul to just be with you
J.C.
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Very good. A great talent
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reply to post by N3krostatic
I really enjoyed that. It made me think of love. Of someone you didn't deserve, but got to love anyway, and then lost. Kind of sad, but generous. A
long time to get over someone.
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reply to post by KSPigpen
Thank you for the kind words. I actually had someone in mind when I wrote this one. Unfortunately she always thought less of herself and chose the
lesser men. I know her well but sometimes even the most beautiful don't know what they have going for them. Thanx again!
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reply to post by N3krostatic
I appreciate you explaining it a little more...I thought it rude to ask, so I just said what it made me feel. Thank you very much for sharing. It was
beautiful and now has much more depth.
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reply to post by Greenize
Thank you so much! I think we both have similar taste in poetry as you seem to always notice my work and since I will check your threads just for new
or more work and I do enjoy every bit of it. Great minds think alike, or perhaps poetic minds. lol 
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reply to post by KSPigpen
Thank you for the compliment and I'll never consider it rude if you ask. As a matter of fact I have received some critiques on my other work and am
grateful for it.
You have also got me thinking, I should always explain my poems. They will make much more sense and fit the setting better. So thank you for asking!
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