A Man's Wish (Poem), page 1

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Topic started on 20-6-2009 @ 04:48 AM by N3krostatic

~ A Mans Wish~

The crossfire of fate he sees in her eyes
Summons a beauty no man can describe

Distant & shadowed she feels she remains
Banished her dreams, she has not attained

Forged by a God of all that is pure
Unscathed by all stains, oh how she endures

A desolate yesterday clings to my soul
Raging with tension to fill this black hole

Out of all sight and out of all sound
These feelings within me are buried and bound

Ascending ablaze an emblem of light
Gives hope to today and smothers the night

Embrace no more tears my beautiful swan
This nightmare has ended, for I bring you dawn

Lost on the outskirts of life do I view
I'd give all my soul to just be with you

J.C.

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reply posted on 22-6-2009 @ 02:15 PM by Blogstalker

Very good. A great talent

reply posted on 22-6-2009 @ 10:55 PM by N3krostatic

reply to post by Blogstalker

Thank you for the compliment. Glad you enjoyed it.

reply posted on 5-8-2009 @ 09:47 PM by KSPigpen

reply to post by N3krostatic

I really enjoyed that. It made me think of love. Of someone you didn't deserve, but got to love anyway, and then lost. Kind of sad, but generous. A long time to get over someone.

reply posted on 5-8-2009 @ 09:54 PM by N3krostatic

reply to post by KSPigpen

Thank you for the kind words. I actually had someone in mind when I wrote this one. Unfortunately she always thought less of herself and chose the lesser men. I know her well but sometimes even the most beautiful don't know what they have going for them. Thanx again!

reply posted on 5-8-2009 @ 10:34 PM by Greenize

That is beautiful!!! I am always so moved by your poetry! You truly are a talent and I am glad that you share it with us!!! Very stirring work of art!

reply posted on 5-8-2009 @ 11:45 PM by KSPigpen

reply to post by N3krostatic

I appreciate you explaining it a little more...I thought it rude to ask, so I just said what it made me feel. Thank you very much for sharing. It was beautiful and now has much more depth.

reply posted on 6-8-2009 @ 12:28 AM by N3krostatic

reply to post by Greenize

Thank you so much! I think we both have similar taste in poetry as you seem to always notice my work and since I will check your threads just for new or more work and I do enjoy every bit of it. Great minds think alike, or perhaps poetic minds. lol

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reply posted on 6-8-2009 @ 12:31 AM by N3krostatic

reply to post by KSPigpen

Thank you for the compliment and I'll never consider it rude if you ask. As a matter of fact I have received some critiques on my other work and am grateful for it.

You have also got me thinking, I should always explain my poems. They will make much more sense and fit the setting better. So thank you for asking!

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