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Feast of the Damned

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posted on May, 25 2009 @ 09:50 PM
He lingered silently 'round many a grave
be it saint or priest or ghastly knave
hooded in black and crimson cloak
from between his lips boils blackish smoke
fingers gnarled and flesh decayed
vengence he seeks or so they say
putrid soul a maggots feast
once a man replaced by beast
He rides forth on ebony steed
filled with anger lust and greed
saber twisting in the air
curses spoken without care
eyes like fire penetrating heat
teeth like razors to tear the meat
ripping flesh from off the bone
cracking skulls with heavy stone
feasting on the rancid dead
a grisly means of being fed
until he has sated the beast within
he cracks the lid and eats again
search he does for the corpse of one
she broke his heart and it was done
he took his life after he took hers
he had to find where she was interred
she been lain in an unmarked plot
her flesh he needed lest it rot
stripped to the bone by those that squirm
maggot.. beatle.. and hungry worm
he thought that this would help him win
to calm the savage beast within
He knew one would tell
he was in fact living in hell
tormented was he both night and day
the lead actor in a macabre play
his was of course the only role
playing out inside his soul
there'll be no bows nor grand applause
you see in curtain calls

[edit on 26-5-2009 by Greenize] title change

[edit on 26-5-2009 by Greenize]

posted on May, 25 2009 @ 10:44 PM
Let me say, to date this is my favorite piece I think...gruesome as it is...I am not sure why, but there you have it. I kind of wish that I had started a macabre poetry thread in collab writing forum, could have been interesting!

posted on May, 26 2009 @ 05:57 PM
I am planning a part two to this piece, her story so to speak...right now I have to get dinner done!

posted on May, 26 2009 @ 07:58 PM
here is the flip side..what had become of her...

Adorned in raiment white as snow
walking down the streets of gold
not a worry nor a care
no remembrance of who sent her there
No recall of the final blow
the kiss of death that left her cold
Surrounded by love and heavenly light
eyes beholding wonderful sights
Crystal clear streams and waterfalls
beautifully structured marble walls
Lovely melodies fill the air
songs of angels voices fair
loved ones missed now found again
happy reunions women and men
home at last no more to roam
he sent her to her Heavenly Home

posted on May, 26 2009 @ 08:09 PM
Very nice, I enjoyed your use of imagery! Well written and rhymed!

posted on May, 26 2009 @ 08:23 PM
reply to post by Tentickles

Thank you, I really had fun writing this, I know that it is morbid, but the visual aspects of it were a blast! Glad you like it!!!

posted on May, 28 2009 @ 10:10 PM
I did start a macabre poetry thread in collab writing..if you like this, please feel free to go and post a poem!!!

posted on May, 28 2009 @ 10:20 PM
reply to post by Greenize

I would have to re work on my poetry. Your own poems flow like water, and I do admire the ability to keep them so active here.

Maybe there is a reason.. who knows? I only receive entire scenes of stories, short or long. it is something that just happens and they take dayssss to write....

posted on May, 28 2009 @ 10:36 PM
reply to post by OrangeJuice

Thank you!! I wish they took me days sometimes! lol I get a thought and I have to get it down right then or my feeble mind forgets it!!

posted on Jun, 2 2009 @ 08:05 PM
reply to post by Greenize

WOW! no.... that was seriously ASTOUNDING! NO JOKE!

I have to ask how long have you been writing poetry?
Because that was AMAZING!!!!! I don't know why but I love darker poems and that was unreal! I felt that one, that is for sure. Got the visuals going in my head and all while reading it.

I think that's my favorite of all you've posted so far!

S&F ! (would give you 100 stars if I could)

That is something that should be referenced to for ridiculously amazing talent!

posted on Jun, 2 2009 @ 08:29 PM

Wonderful idea you have as well! Perhaps I'll be brave...

Thanks so much for sharing your talents with us!

posted on Jun, 2 2009 @ 10:08 PM
reply to post by N3krostatic

**Blush** Thank you! I hesitated posting that one, but I loved it so that I just had to!! I am glad that you liked it! I have been writing poetry all of my life, the onyl thing is, once an idea comes to me I have to get it down right then or I forget it... You have some amazing pieces here too!

posted on Jun, 2 2009 @ 10:10 PM
reply to post by Whisper67

Thank you very much! I did start the macbre thread, please post some of your work. I would love to read it!!!

posted on Jun, 2 2009 @ 10:26 PM
reply to post by Greenize

Should be no hesitation with something of that magnitude!

Understood also about getting it down ASAP before it leaves. Unfortunately most of mine come to mind while trying to sleep. lol

Poetry, the art of expression is one of the best for sure!

posted on Jun, 2 2009 @ 10:49 PM
reply to post by N3krostatic

Funny, some of my best ideas hit me too as I am trying to sleep. I have to get up get on my pc open note pad and put it down! I just know I have lost some good ones by being to lazy to get up!!

posted on Jan, 13 2010 @ 11:46 PM
Upon rereading this, it has come to me that this reminds me of someone that I know! Hmmmm

posted on Jan, 13 2010 @ 11:52 PM
Wow... That was an amazing piece!

I was completely immersed into this morbid character. You have a wonderful talent, can't wait to read more of these.


posted on Jan, 13 2010 @ 11:56 PM
reply to post by serbsta

Thank you! Morbid as it is , I love this one! I appreciate your kind words!! Occasionally a dark mood falls....LOL

posted on Feb, 25 2010 @ 11:55 PM
Fire and brimstone day and night
his rage continues at his plight
scream and curse trapped in this den
satan now his only friend

I came in and reread this and this verse came to me...thought I would add it!

posted on Nov, 8 2010 @ 11:03 PM
reply to post by Greenize

I had forgotten this one! Geez I still love it! LOL

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