Okay, team, I'm just gonna lay it out here...
Here's where your rookie-writer is stuck....It seemed to me that we barely
got our crew safely away from Vandalia, with Pip, the girls, Gert,
Margo, Brittle and Toby all aboard. There were crushes developing, relationships changing, a crisis just dealt with, and we all made it.
We got back and had a meeting. Silo was staying under the radar in the center with Pip where they were gonna build a cabin. Neno received news of a
claim for the planet Kahlamdazar (sp?), and so that's where we were going, with a Tree-of-Life theme, where the tree is in the Center(?), and a bunch
of ghostly wolves and a transparent version of neno and a guy named Corimmurnicrum (or something like that)...then the tree was on Kahl*, and we were
headed for neno's nemesis/our new plot.
After that, this is what happened:
Carpet is a man, and Ship is pissed at him. He loved silo(?)
Adam goes to the Center and finds solace with silo.
Neno tells him to knock it off and make it right with Dag.
Silo and Pip go riding and Sslar gets shot, and Toby killed
Silo is in the Phars.
Carpet and neno bond and talk about Carpet's worries.
Neno moves to the Starwolf (somewhere in here?)
Adam operates on Sslar with a gun to his head, then punches neno.
Neno has reprimanded Pip and knows the pain the boy will be enduring,
neno is aparently is carnally reunited with Margo, who was jealous that Jeni came there, thinking Chumley in his suit was neno himself, and Chumley
rescues her. Then neno and Margo make up(?), Pip is in the center(?) alone? Neno is caring for him?
Sslar is in ICU,
Ben has found Brittle and dragged him to his reckoning,
while Mucklebones and Gert and Dag are sorting things out...
as we approach the planet...
and were told to get suited up....
but now Ship is incarnating, and she and silo had a falling out,
and the girls were "loose ends" instead of "the crew we've wanted",
and Moriah was going to room with Jeni,
who Chumley is deceiving with Carpet's help,
Adam has ducked out,
I don't know where Tibbs is, or what BIAD's doing, ....... or have any inkling of where we're heading for a resolution with the Tree of Life and the
I apologize if I have missed something crucial that is guiding us forward, I really do, but I'm utterly lost now. I have nothing to grip onto, and no
goal in place.
It just seems to jump around with no closure, no cohesion....I have no doubt we can tie it all together, but I don't see how, unless we actually
discuss timelines, objectives, general comings and goings, relationship futures (will they make up? will they break up? will they ...whatever...).and
who is going to "check out" the NPCs for how long and to do what. Maybe we need to establish...okay, I need so-and-so for such-and-such until
But that's just my style. So without some kind of direction I sometimes get stuck....If it's more of a "bounce-off immediate interaction" than a
"small groups" kind of plan, that's cool, too....
In fact, if Muckles is at Ship's incarnation that can be PART of the hazing, but then which of us is going to write for Muckles? What about Pip? And
Sslar? Where did Adam go?
WHAT IN THE SAM HILL IS GOING ON HERE??!!
I can't get a grip on any one of those. I'm unsure of what is appropriate and what is not...I know nothing about CyndyMars, but I feel every day
wait. what now? ...but I thoug--....wasn't he...say what... she did? he what?....but if.... okay, erm....they were.....she's
So, I was wondering if we might ask our one "reader" and mod, masqua, to give an opinion as a reader. We lack an objective reader's pov, and I think
it's time we had one....maybe to help us regain our focus? Coach us? He may not have time, and if so, then maybe there are other "readers" who might
give us an opinion, a critique or feedback...of what he or she would like to see focus on, which loose ends need addressing, what confusion needs
clearing up...which tangent is most intriguing......
Not demanding it, just trying to think through how to get from here to there.....
Just my opinion. We can discuss, vote, dismiss, whatever. I just wanted to express my personal stuckedness and its wherefores.....however we decide
to do it is fine....
teamwork outline goal-driven, or fencing improvisation to keep one another on our toes. as in "what if I said.....this
! what would you say?"
I'm fine with that, can do it well...it's what we do at the renaissance festival as performers...improv. But that's not the same as an overarching
storyline in which all action and movement should be aimed in the same direction.
/writer's seizure processing and inner monologue
edit on 12-5-2012 by wildtimes because: (no reason given)