I have to agree with cbass, this is only a story. Now, I might actually be more inclined to believe it, if the author didn't claim to be a writer.
Writers do not relate personal experiences in this stilted manner.
Look at some of the lines, and ask yourself who relates a personal experience like this:
With head aching slightly and heart pounding I sit down to write what I have seen while being next to one of the many gates here on the planet
which are normally guarded and in places so remote and inconspicuous that most would never venture to find or even know where they were if they did
not as myself by chance stumble next to one at just the right time of day to see it.
Wouldn't you write something like this instead?
"My head aches and my heart is pounding, but I am going to write what I have seen in my experiences with these gates. From what I understand,
these gates are normally guarded and located in places so remote and inconspicuous, that most would never stumble upon them."
The style is all wrong for relating a personal experience. Here are some other statements that I find problematic:
In my youth, I ventured outdoors often alone. One afternoon, I came across some crates in the back of an old abandoned building.
Being an outdoor adventurer in my younger days I happened upon a place where one bright and sunny afternoon I spied some crates in the back of
an old abandoned set of buildings.
Have you ever used the term "spied" when writing a personal account?
Other statements which don't ring true to a first person account of a genuine experience:
strange looking man appeared with piercing dark eyes
He spoke softly and with a quiet sort of gentle voice
I realized that again my eyes had deceived me
my senses were on heightened alert as I said my goodbyes and left
You would expect more statements like, "I saw"; or, "I heard"; maybe, "I had seen the crates there earlier, but now they were gone."
These are not first person experiences, which tend toward how a person felt, what they observed or experienced. There are many conclusions drawn
which this person wouldn't know:
He had an easy going demeanor
-- how would you know this in spending five minutes with the guy?
They turned out to be most probably the barrier between realities sort of like a safe zone. They kept not only prying eyes away from what I had
discovered but there was a definite feeling or sense of safety when I was near them.
Note the author doesn't say, "I concluded that they were
probably some sort of barrier. . . to keep others from discovering them."
My eyes went huge as I stared at his pittiful broken and bruised cheeks, swollen eyes and dirty greasy blood dried hair and face.
"my eyes went huge?" Try, "I was shocked to see. . ."
he stepped out with a cheshire grin on his morbid face
. But wait, wasn't he merely "strange looking" before, "with an easy going
He looked like a vampire in the moment, hungry for my flesh or wose yet my soul. His eyes became inhuman looking, red around the outside,
yellowish and sick on the inside untill slowly they faded into a bottomless pit of mirror like quality.
I don't mean to criticize the author, but the story needs work. I could probably post more, but I won't. This really needs to be labeled as
FICTION, otherwise, it would seem to violate the T&C in that it is purposely trying to deceive others.