Edited: Sensationalist journalism

I edited my article to include my most recent updates to it. I made a lot of changes to it. I added a lot more information. I'm making it current.

How does it look so far? Do I need to make changes to it to make it better? What should I do?

That is a really good article. I see you worked on it really hard. I am giving you 10,000 pts for it. Thank you for your hard work.

reply to post by Frankidealist35

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Hi....

I went over your article and changed some things around....kind of cleaned it up. I fixed the spelling, grammar, and punctuation, and cleaned up the formatting some.

There was also some double information (the first 4 sections in the article were duplicated) that I took out.

Look it over, and let me know what you think.