and rolled over onto his side before tuning his pillow over onto a cool and fresh side. Before he shut his eyes, he made a mental note to ask his Nan if she had any ideas what these words meant. He thought it unlikely, but it was worth asking.
At 4:18 am Todd fell back asleep.


This short story was all about the atmosphere I tried to create - I hope you dig it.

OK..not sure why you started a new thread to finish part one.Perhaps the Mods could adjust that for you.
Honestly, part one...my god.Beautifully descriptive.I felt like I was really there.No kidding.That was amazing. Literally left me breathless.
Part 2, you need to add more.Please.Iam on the edge of my seat, and that is rare.It takes a lot to put me in this state of mind when I read.YOU NEED TO KEEP WRITING.
Absolutely amazing piece of work.
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Thanks for your very kind words.

I had to start a new thread because the computer told me to do so.

I'll have a creative beer or two and see what I can add to it seeing as you'd like more.

Thanks again - I really appreciate your comments.