Wrote this today, any comments appreciated.
UNBOUND
Bled, dry, not breathing,
Hear the cry, seething,
Blind to the unlight,
Not seeing.
Not dry, not bleeding,
Not here, not dreaming,
In the darkness,
Just being.
Creeping, cold, not feeling,
Growing old, screaming,
Deaf to the unsound,
Not hearing.
Not dry, not bleeding,
Not here, not dreaming,
In the darkness,
Just being.
Sated, full, not eating,
Reach the sky, teasing,
Numb to the untouch,
Not feeling.
Not dry, not bleeding,
Not here, not dreaming,
In the darkness,
Just being.
Just being,
Not hearing,
Not seeing,
Not feeling,
Just being,
Unlight-
Unsound-
Untouch-
Unbound.
Free.
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A physical journey to the next realm, or a mental journey to enlightenment. With the corus feel, there could be a great heavy metal song in this. This
could be on the next Staind album, it has a feel to me of one of their song. You may have to add a little bit or shave some to fit, that is if you
want this to by lyrics, in stead of a poem.
**Just the thoughts of a mad man, take them with a grain of salt**
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I wrote it more lyrically than as a poem, i had a rythm in my head as i wrote it.
I was in a bad place at the time but its all good now. More of a journey through that period really.
cheers mojo.
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