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(DOC) Thats what Friends are for.

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posted on Jul, 28 2006 @ 01:38 PM
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OK, well I hope you like this, its a little different to the others that i've read so far....


Thats What Friends are For



“Whatcha doin’?”

“Nothing much, just writing a story for some internet site competition.”

“Really, what you gonna write about?”

“Honestly, I have no idea. I’ve toyed with a possible story about Alien Abduction.”

“What the hell do you know about ‘Alien Abduction’?”

“Well, I, ummm, I’ve seen all the ‘X-Files’”

“The ‘X-Files’ eh, seems to me you’re on a winner.”

“You being sarcastic?”

“Sarcastic, me? Never!”

“OK, you think of something?”

“I’m not a story teller.”

“So then, let me be with my idea.”

“But, just seems to me that if you want a winner, you want something that you both know about AND is something slightly different.”

“I know that, that’s why I had other ideas too.”

“Ohh yeah, what like?”

“Well, I planned a story based around two characters having a conversation. Lets call one of them General John and the other Commander Colin.”

“So, it’s a Military type one?”

“Nope, two internet Geeks”

“See, THAT you know about!”

“Cheeky Bastard”

“I meant that some of your friends fit that description.”

“Sure ya did. Anyway, the premise was going to be two internet Geeks who accidentally hack into the computer of a business man.”

“Yeah, sounds a bit blah at the moment,”

“It gets better and remember it’s just an idea.”

“OK, carry on.”

“Well, at first glance, the information is pretty mundane, so the geeks decide to play around with it.”

“BORING”

“Why is that ‘Boring’?”

“’Cause I’m bored.”

“Well, you think of something.”

“I already told you…”

“Yes I know ‘I’m not a story teller’. You wanna dis my story then you can come up with better, if you can’t then shut up.”

“FINE! Lead Character, we’ll call him Mark, is a 21 year old who is living on the streets, we’ll say New York….”

“Why New York?”

“Because everything happens in New York”

“But isn’t that why you should pick somewhere else. You are from Leeds, use Leeds. At least you know it.”

“OK, Mark, 21, Homeless on the streets of Leeds. Happy?”

“Ecstatic.”

“Hmmm, anyway, Marks parents were murdered when he was 15, along with his Twin Sister Maria, by a business associate of his father.”

“OK, that’s an interesting start, what next?”

“I’m getting to that!”

“Hurry up then, there is a time limit for me to write mine you know.”

“OK. Well on the night of Marks 21st Birthday, he stumbles across the naked body of his twin sister.”

“Hmmm.”

“’Hmmm’? What’s ‘Hmmm’?

“Just following your story, showing I’m still here.”

“Thanks. OK, well he wakes his sister up and it turns out, she has no memory of the last 6 years, but she IS his sister That she does know.”

“Plot twist, cool.”

“Thanks. Well Mark doesn’t understand what is going on, because although the bodies of his family were never found, Guy admitted to the murders.”

“Guy?”

“Sorry, the business associate, didn’t I say, it’s a man called Guy.”

“OK, I’m up to speed.”

“Indeed. Well Mark realises he needs to see Guy….”

“Guy, that’s a crap name, can’t you think of something better?”

“It’s a work in progress.”

“OK, also, what if Guy was a girl…woman, does that affect your story?”

“Not really, and actually, making it a woman makes the ‘reveal’ a bit better.”

“Cool, and you said you’re not a story teller! Puh-Lease.”

“I’m not, this is an idea, I’m crap at execution.”

“OK. So whats the big reveal?”

“Ohh, yeah, sorry. Well it turns out that this woman didn’t actually murder the family, actually she was part of an underground movement that faked the murders for something bigger.”

“Interesting, what?”

“Well, that’s where I’m stuck.”

“Why?”

“I don’t know what happens next, maybe you could think of something?”

“Yeah, OK. How’s this? About now, it turns out the company that the woman and Marks dad worked for had some issue. Maybe two hackers….”

“Forget that ‘Hacker’ story, its crap!”

“Fine.”

“FINE!”

“Well, its time to go.”

“Yeah, whatever.”

“Fine, speak to you later.”

“See Ya”

“Yeah, bye”




posted on Jul, 28 2006 @ 01:48 PM
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NOTE: This ix my own story, not a copy/paste from IM...and i know you knew that, i'm just saying



posted on Jul, 28 2006 @ 02:18 PM
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that's the thing about dialogue...it is exactly like a conversation in a chat room or whatever form of messaging that's popular today. Heck, you could tape your little brother teasing you right up until you whup his butt and then transcribe it all for the contest. But, thanks for your honesty...I, like, totally believe you, JebusSaves.

Interesting story
and thanks for entering this contest.



posted on Jul, 28 2006 @ 05:28 PM
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I just thought a 'story' about a 'story told as if it was one guy conversing with another was interesting.

I suppose if even one person is unsure that this is made up or a genuine conversation, then 'my work here is done'.



posted on Jul, 29 2006 @ 10:01 PM
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Incase anyone else wants a read and a comment......its a bump.



posted on Jul, 31 2006 @ 08:59 PM
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This is the reason I never tell anyone what I'm writing until I have written it down at least once, I can't count the number of times my husband totally hijacks my story or makes me question what I'm writing before I've even written it, so I could relate. Very Nice.



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