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Would you listen ?

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posted on Jan, 28 2006 @ 11:10 AM
(my first attempt at writing something)

Did I love you
as much as I thought ?
Or was I that blind
and simply forgot?

Forgot myself
and who I am
What if I told you
Would you understand?

Would you understand
if I said
That its not you,
but the pretending i can't stand...

Look how miserable we are
Lost in the perfect scenario
of our minds

That we forgot our hearts
and how they feel
for what I don’t know
but I know it makes me ill

Would you let me finish ?
Would you listen to the end ?
Would you even care
If I told you

That though I can no longer
give you my heart
You will always
have my hand

Don’t you see?
Won’t you think and admit?
That it is as much over for you
As it is for me?

Why all this pretending?
What’s the point of you & me?
When we both know
this is not where we want to be.

So please listen,
Look at me,
For all we were and had.
Lets not fool ourselves...

Just keep in mind
and try to understand,
that though I can no longer
give you my heart

You will always,
Have my hand.

posted on Jan, 28 2006 @ 11:24 AM
Hey thats great work. I love it. So thoguhful and emotion provoking.

I like see poetry written from the heart and soul like that.

posted on Jan, 29 2006 @ 07:31 PM
Thank you
... it did come from the heart ... and thats very me thinking

posted on Feb, 1 2006 @ 06:26 AM
Thats awsome friend, it sounds like your about to break it off with someone. Some times a pearl is born of our deepest irritations.

[edit on 1-2-2006 by TgSoe]

posted on Feb, 1 2006 @ 09:12 AM
Great work, Baas. Very emotional.


posted on Feb, 2 2006 @ 11:45 PM
Thanks for the feedback guys ... i know its nothing special, but because its the first poem i have ever wrote... i still can't believe it came from me... what cloud was wovering over me that day ?? wow

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