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(MFSE) The Pyramid

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posted on Sep, 19 2005 @ 06:00 PM
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The Pyramid

YOU opened up the doorway
AND risked a look inside.
YOU couldn't share the vision
AND the truth you had to hide.

YOU didn't build the pyramid
AND structure things just right.
YOU went and split the atom
AND were blinded by sunlight.

YOU forgot to use a mirror
AND bounce it all around.
YOU turned away, closed the eye
AND didn't speak a sound.

YOU didn't see me watching
AND knowing all the lie.
YOU kept on chaining spirit
AND didn't hear it's sigh.

YOU lusted for more power
AND greed went hand in hand.
YOU acquired gold and diamonds
AND built castles in the sand.

YOU built up debt to Mother Earth
AND that will never be repaid.
YOU reaped the crop that you sowed
AND lay in the bed you made.

YOU have asked for nature's fury
AND that is exactly what you'll get.
YOU know nature is the balance
AND at dusk the sun will set.




posted on Sep, 23 2005 @ 07:13 AM
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YOU didn't see me watching
AND knowing all the lie.
YOU kept on chaining spirit
AND didn't hear it's sigh.

YOU lusted for more power
AND greed went hand in hand.
YOU acquired gold and diamonds
AND built castles in the sand.


Very beautiful, Mayet.
It is good to see another poetry entry in the contest. Well written poetry always has the effect of making me feel quite stupid, and The Pyramid was extremely well written, so thanks very much
.

But I have to know - who was speaking?



"YOU didn't see me watching
AND knowing all the lie.


Is it God? Mother Nature? On second thought, I don't want to know. One of the elements of your poetry that I have always loved is the respect with which you treat your readers and the subtle things that go unsaid or unexplained.

Well done once again, Mayet. I look forward to reading more of your work.



posted on Sep, 27 2005 @ 06:18 PM
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Hi Mayet,

Your poem is beautiful, and another one that I enjoyed reading because I didnt get lost in trying to decipher the meaning. I felt such power in those words and I wondered who was speaking. I thought of God, Mother earth, or even the Universe. However, what I felt inside was that it was ME saying those words, my true spirit, or higher self. The words were to be such a fundemental truth, a truth that I knew, but chose to ignore until the "sun set".

This is a great story in poetic form Mayet! I really enjoyed reading it.
Good luck to you!!



posted on Oct, 2 2005 @ 09:17 AM
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I agree with the above posters, great piece of poetry.
well written, good rythem and thought provoking choice of words.




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