posted on Jun, 25 2005 @ 09:04 PM
Source: Intro Paragraph
In another tragic shark attack, a 14 year old girl was attacked and suffered the loss of a leg before dying of blood loss and shock
shortly after. Though sharks are often spotted in the Gulf of Mexico this is the first shark attack for the area near Destin, Florida. The
victim's friend witnessed the attack, but could not identify the species of the 11 foot shark.
There is a fair amount of bias in the intro......first of all, I want to state that I agree that this story is tragic. Your use of words is merely a
Tragedy - connotative word. Elucidates an emotional response that draws the reader to a pre-fashioned conclusion prior to the ingestion of all
Suffered - connotative word. Very unspecific and subjective; i.e. there are many ways to suffer and it's generally accepted as a bad thing, thus,
the reader is drawn into an emotional context.
Victim - connotative word. Just as a point for Devil's Advocate.....who's to say she wasn't the noble reciever of shark bite? Extremist example,
but there to illustrate the subjective nature of the word.
Again, I agree with your perspective of the story and showcase this for you to help explain the case for bias.....your use of biased words are not an
accusation of intention......just merely being pointed out.....
To summarize the point of the intro paragraph........
"Just the facts, Ma'am."