So i posted two other things that hardly anybody replyed too. that's probably because they are longer and people don't feel like wasting time...but how's this....?

A Long Fall

It’s a long way down
From here to the ground
Your heart is faster beating
And your body is heating
You ask and ask yourself
Talking out loud as if there’s someone else
“Will anybody even frown”
“When my lifeless body lies on the ground”

You’re falling, like a dead weight
You’re falling faster still
You’re falling to your fate
You’re falling and it’s your own freewill

It’s late, no it’s early
You can see the sunrise
Too bad your memories
Don’t allow light to reach your eyes
And you don’t think, but you know
It’s time for you to go

You’re falling, like a dead weight
You’re dropping faster still
You’re falling to your fate
As life racks up another kill

Your life took you through hell
But, no one, no one could even tell
But you’ll get there attention
With your final infliction
So here you are
Falling down to the passing cars
And you’re flying without wings
Just to get away from everything

You’re falling, like a dead weight
You’re falling faster still
You’re falling to your fate
You’re falling and it’s your own freewill

On your face is your fear
But no love is left here

Second chances, second hopes
Don’t come here, there isn’t a rope
To grab on to, grab on to
Too late to start over new

You’re falling, like a dead weight
You’re dropping faster still
You’re falling to your fate
As life racks up another kill

Too late to decide
That you change your mind

You’re falling, like a dead weight
You’re falling faster still
You’re falling to your fate
You’re falling and it’s your own freewill

Oh and through your eyes
Your regret flows
But what you now realize
Only the ground knows

You’re falling, like a dead weight
You’re dropping faster still
You’re falling to your fate
As life racks up another kill

Too late to decide
That you change your mind

Oh and through your eyes
Your regret flows
But what you now realize
Only the ground knows

Thanks, yeah I'm original unless i say otherwise......and please don't take that combination as a sign. No going on rampages and then killing yourself

excellent, beautiful and touching.

Excellent work

Thank you.....should i be posting a reply to say thank you?...ehh i dunno, but i just did

Thats an awesome job. It is a very intense song, with a powerful meaning. I would love to hear any music put along with it. I bet it would make a great song. Keep up the good writing.